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Raped into Submission
Author: Lonely Puppet
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(Added on May 20, 2007)
(This month 66293 readers) (Total 89404 readers) |
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A young man is taken prisoner by an innocent-looking woman who turns him into her sex slave. |
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| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
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May 31, 2008 |
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As far as bdsm fiction this works for me. Unrealistic? Probably, but so what. I enjoyed it. (8/10)
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rattlesnake99
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May 10, 2008 |
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i like your stories, too bad you didn't wrote anymore! (9/10)
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topsfrombottom
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Jun 1, 2007 |
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Quick. Tight. Flowing... Nice.
tfb.. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 31, 2007 |
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good idea butnot realistic to me (7/10)
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stimpy
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May 31, 2007 |
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Well written story -- main fault is that it is too short! I agree with other reviewers that a bit more break in time would make more sense. An alternative would be making it clear that the guy was a sub before he was captured. He just didn't know exactly what he was looking for... until he got it. (8/10)
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Razor7826
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May 21, 2007 |
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Overall, a decent start, but the other reviews are right that he breaks too quickly. It takes a long time for somebody to accept a completely different lifestyle. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Lonely Puppet
(Edit) (May 21, 2007)
- Thanks for the reviews, all of you. This is the first erotica story I wrote so the feedback is really helping me. I'm kind of torn between rewriting the story to fix my mistakes or starting a new one.
If anyone would like to give me advice on which way to go, let me know and thanks for reading. I don't know if the number of views I got is normal for a story here or not but I think it's awesome that almost 5,000 people have read my story so far and I'm definately encouraged to keep writing.
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azrlg17
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May 21, 2007 |
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Aha, he is raped for one day and he is broken? She let's him free after that and he doesn't try to kill her? Pleeeeaaaaaaase. Give him half a year or at least a month. If you torture someone while he is helpless how does that break him? The only way to do that is to show him that even if he's free he can't get away. Let him make one or 2 unsuccessful escape attempts. Punish him for it, why else would he be afraid to try something? Find a way for her to beat him without drugs and restraints.
Spelling and grammar are OK, the sex is much too clinical and short. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
topsfrombottom
(Edit) (Jul 6, 2007)
- Agreed - Keeping in mind that this was his 1st attempt at esoterica, I yet stand by my review. As for 'realism', well, the fact that she used a bit of head-work on him up front ('Tsk, tsk. Nobody would have heard you anyways, I've soundproofed this room. You'll notice you're naked now... I burned your clothes, took the money out of your wallet then burned your wallet too. You won't need them anymore... ever.') helped a bit.
Puppet, a really good example of an 'FD/nc/kidnap/breaking' work that's yet in progress -I'M PRAYING- can be found here under an Authoress named 'Tara', entitled, simply, 'HIM'. Sept.'06 saw the most current update (Pt 7)-MAN, I hope Tara's still into adding to it; it was looking DAMN good- IMHO, anyway. Regardless, that story's a good example of the work and time involved in 'breaking' a man down toward complete submission. You'll find it listed in my bookshelf.
tc, & k.u.t.g.w.,
tfb..
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sirbor
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May 21, 2007 |
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I liked the story but it moved too fast during the breaking in process. I would have thought that he would have held out longer. Too bad this doesn't happen in real life. Keep up the good work. (7/10)
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