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Fulfillment
Author: Papierklammer
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(Added on May 18, 2007)
(This month 14893 readers) (Total 30516 readers) |
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A wife achieves her destiny with a new role in her husband’s household. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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May 19, 2007 |
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I enjoyed your story, but your grammar was seriously lacking. Perhaps English is not your first language? Improve your grammar and I will be happy to raise your score. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Shakespeare_I._Aint
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May 19, 2007 |
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Beastility stories aren't usually that good--this one is better than 99% of the ones out there! Good job! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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May 19, 2007 |
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A very hot story, intense even, and touching a lot of hot buttons.
Yes it needs to be cleaned up a bit. (bet you never thought there'd be a grammar review did you?)The best recommendation I can give. Let it sit for a few days then reread it carefully (even aloud) to catch some of those little gaffes. If you feel like it you might hit the forum and check out the ‘Author’s Garret’
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=41
You could easily find someone to help with editing. It’s amazing how helpful a second set of eyes is.
You’ve got great writing potential, keep it up.
(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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May 19, 2007 |
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A nice story, good flow and dialogue and well imagined, but there's a lot of trouble with the technical details -- wrong words, incomplete sentences, etc. A gem in the rough! (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Snark
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May 18, 2007 |
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The premise and progresssion work, but serious editing is called for. Words are left out, wrong words subsituted (spell checker doesn't do grammer.) A little more work could result in a geatly improved story. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
JayTC
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May 18, 2007 |
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Very good fantasy....very interesting read! (8/10)
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