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Author: Cruelsmile
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(Added on May 18, 2007)
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Soccer mom begins to give in. |
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mkemse
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May 31, 2007 |
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great story the only hing that would have nade it better would have be a NC (Non Consensual) theme rather then consensual (9/10)
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chksng19
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May 20, 2007 |
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An interesting and literate piece, well written (although not to my taste aroma-wise). Perhaps earning the right to clean herself with some clips here and there? Clothespins? A flogging?
I'm interested to see the next piece. (9/10)
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Shakespeare_I._Aint
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May 19, 2007 |
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It's a good story plotwise and actionwise. The formatting is poor and maybe an editor could have cleaned it up and smoothed it out a bit, but the talent and promise are clearly there. Very Good Job! (8/10)
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Mad Lews
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May 19, 2007 |
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Quite enjoyable. If you save the story in .HTML format then submit it you'll maintain your original form in the posting (I learned from personal experience). Keep up the great work for a first timer it's very very good. (9/10)
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Snark
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May 18, 2007 |
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Interesting. The formating came through disorganized which was distracting. A bit of editing would help, especially in continuity. As per the previous review, continuing with piercing, and perhaps toilet and orgasm denial could increase her tension. (8/10)
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bullnuts43
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May 18, 2007 |
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I enjoyed it, and thought you had spent some time writing this, next installment I personally would like to have him pierce her tits and clit, and do things like he did this time, I mean embarrass her, and maybe have her shave?
bullnuts43 (8/10)
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