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Victim Of The Patriot Act
Author: Blackdog
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(Added on May 6, 2007)
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(Violence, rape torture) Of a female who gas violated the Patriot Act. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
d1ll1gaf
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Jul 27, 2011 |
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I agree with the previous posters about the quality of the writing, it needs a full edit.
The quality of the story more than makes up for the poor writing. If this was re-written to fix the errors I would give it 10/10, but as is am giving it a 7/10 (7/10)
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tbear4759
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Jun 14, 2007 |
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even the synopsis has a mis-spelling. this is awful. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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May 7, 2007 |
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Yup, CortezFan, i agree about the caps. A couple other things; you tighten up ropes with winches, not wenches. The belly button is the navel, not naval... that's ships & such. Women do NOT piss from their pussies; it is an entirely separate hole which just happens to be in the same area.
Lots of concerns about the writing level of the tale; a re-write might fix the errors but it's still a very poor telling. (3/10)
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CortezFan
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May 7, 2007 |
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I might have been able to read it if it wasnt all in CAPITAL LETTERS. In the business world that is considered shouting and is very unreadable. (2/10)
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