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Sister's Hoe
Author: Femdom slave
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(Added on Mar 29, 2007)
(This month 128905 readers) (Total 206492 readers) |
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A sister (with her mom's help) turns her brother into the true slave that he is. Read as this adventure begins and ends. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
hunter12
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May 30, 2007 |
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it's a very good story and i hope it continues. one of my favorites on the site, keep up the good work! (9/10)
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sissychar
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May 8, 2007 |
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SO humiliating! Awesome (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sindorei
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Apr 4, 2007 |
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An improvement over the first part, loved the content and it shows potential. The grammer mistakes were my one complaint.(7/10) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Femdomslave23
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Apr 3, 2007 |
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the second part is better written and improved than the orginal one. GOOD TIME FOR A FIRST WRITER. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
SirBosk1
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Mar 31, 2007 |
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Even though this is a very short submittal, I couldn't get past the first third. The author doesn't punctuate properly, leaves out critical words and in general, should have someone read the story out loud, exactly as written before submitting.
Example: '“No you move, bitch,” I soon regretted it because it hit her on her tit.'
What hit her? In addition, there should be a comma after "No." (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Mar 31, 2007 |
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Great start for a first time writer. Please don't wait too long to continue with this and hopefully make the next chapter a little longer.
Take care (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Mar 30, 2007 |
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The plot is not bad and it has potential. Hope to read more in the future (7/10)
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- Replied by:
slaveneedledick
(Edit) (May 8, 2007)
- Excellent second chapter though it seemed a little rushed.
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