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Nick\'s Hospitality
Author: This Girl
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(Added on Feb 22, 2007)
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Miss Mara turns to Nick for promised \"hospitality\" in her time of need and gets tricked into becoming his slave. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Panther007
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Jun 13, 2007 |
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Great characters in a fascinating story. I love Mara and can't wait to see what other horrible things are in store for her. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Eponine
(Edit) (Jul 30, 2007)
- Panther, thank you dear for your review! I regret to say I may not ever get around to posting more...
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Mar 10, 2007 |
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A fine beginning, This Girl. Good exploration of the girl's emotions, and fine foreshadowing. The lack of a quick romp to the sexual side is nice too; makes the story feel more naturally told.
Oooh, evil companions! And good pain, well explained, of both physical and emotional. Keep it coming, please. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisGirl
(Edit) (Mar 2, 2007)
- Thank you, chksng19! I hope you will be as pleased with the upcoming parts!
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| Reviewer:
ElectricBadger
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Feb 28, 2007 |
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Very well written, with a great plot and a long-term forced submission that's completely believable. As mentioned, it's slow and the first paragraph or two are a bit rocky -- I'd like to have more background and description -- but it promises a lot of fun. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisGirl
(Edit) (Feb 28, 2007)
- Thank you for your time, your words, and your high score, ElectricBadger! The next part contains some of the juicy stuff we all like to read :P as well as more character and background development.
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Feb 26, 2007 |
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This is a good little tale, over all, with promises of becoming substancially more interesting. I enjoyed the change of perspectives part way through the story. It brought a sudden fever to the girl's situation. Most notably, it is something that usualy ruins a story. It was pulled off quite nicely here. Technically, the story is pretty soild, though it could be tightened up - and the many hyphens eliminated. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisGirl
(Edit) (Feb 26, 2007)
- Thank you for the insightful review, H Dean! I appreciate your time very much.
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| Reviewer:
Kingfisher
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Feb 24, 2007 |
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For a first time writer she is excellent. Sure further on there will be some more of erotic overtures.Needs a bit of guidance from people who have been through in real life.
All the best for future writings.
Sam p. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisGirl
(Edit) (Feb 25, 2007)
- Thank you for taking the time to review. I would love to read elaboration on the guidance needed from those who have real experience.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 23, 2007 |
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A disturbing story, and just the introduction, but clear and well-written. So far this is a story of psychological torture, which is a nice break from the more common kind. I probably should've waited until more was posted before reviewing, but no one else had, so I'm trying to provide a little encouragement. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ThisGirl
(Edit) (Feb 24, 2007)
- Thank you for your comments! And I really appreciate your posting before more was written- because I have been waiting for reviews before I posted more! This is my first time, so I was waiting to see people's feedback and make changes as necessary to the next part.
Thanks again!
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