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Hard Time for the Prisoner
Author: Floyd Polgar
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(Added on Dec 5, 2006)
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The dictator was so angry that he had taken everything away from her: all she owned; her freedom; all contact with the outside world; and even her very identity as a human being. The manual instructed the guards to call her simply X. Her entire universe now consisted of the harshest prison in Latin America where, as the manual said, the prisoner will be kept where she shall be forgotten and her life made a hell until old age comes and she eventually dies. She was just 23 years old. She was short with brown skin and black hair. Oddly, the tortures had developed instead of diminished the muscle tone of her body, what with the stress put on it by the ropes pulling and stretching her limbs and torso into painful positions. Her legs had slender but feminine curves. The brown skin of her thighs had a sheen. Her soft tummy was flat. But it was a body and a mind that could never again know the companionship of another human being, only hate, hurt, fear, and pain. This is a story of doom a life lived without hope; a relentless assault on her humanity; and a daily and never-ending struggle to keep that humanity. A life were she must expect that every human being she encounters will hurt her, except . . . . |
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| Reviewer:
BigNose
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May 19, 2007 |
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I don't know how to put it, but it is a really interesting story. I have never read a story like this before.
Very nice job, keep it up. (10/10)
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little_bella
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Jan 9, 2007 |
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This story is a work of art that goes a step beyond the typical erotica found on this site. I actually wept for X and found myself wanting to help her, much like the guard.
Switching from the guard's manual to the guard's voice to the prisoner's voice is smooth and you detail all her trials and tribulations in agonizing detail. Truly, if you are not a publish author you should look into it. You most definitely have a gift.
I anxiously await the next installment.
bella (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
whpike
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Dec 18, 2006 |
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started a little slow, but grew on me. the story is extreamly well written, very easy to read. Great work, looking foward to future chapters.
Update after chapter 11:
I've raised the rateing to a 10, this story keeps getting better and better.... (10/10)
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chksng19
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Dec 15, 2006 |
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The catholic nun habit parts are "wimple" and "veil". "Veal" is a type of beef.
An oddly grabbing story. Yes, you feel sorry for the victim, and sorry for the guard, too. But I feel sorry for the society which will spend THIS much time and money on one prisoner, without advertising her suffering. They must be RICH!
12/15: The story progresses well. "The poorest woman on earth." Praying for the dead victim; suffering extra so she might pray for her. A powerful segment indeed. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
floydpolgar
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2006)
- Thanks for the comments guys. Veil, veal, potato, potata - okay, I couldn't resist - grin! Thanks, I do want to get my words right, it should read "veil". As for advertising her suffering, that comes later, stay tuned. I'm building up to that. Though spending a lot of time and money on one prisoner is not uncommon in history. Just off the top of my head, I think of Rudolph Hess in Spandau Prison - an entire prison for just one man. Thanks again.
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Mothbrad
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Dec 9, 2006 |
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Wow! What a great story! One of the rare stories here which both ring my erotic 'bells', and also keep me on the edge of my seat. There is some real talent here, and although I notice that you've only got one story published here so far, I'm going to be searching out anything else you might have written.
Please, keep it up, and keep them coming! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
floydpolgar
(Edit) (Dec 9, 2006)
- Wow! What a great review! (grin.) My first 10. Thank you.
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Dec 7, 2006 |
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Ilove it, keep going (9/10)
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JonMaddux
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Dec 6, 2006 |
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Very good job!! I loved the sensory deprivation and the intense detail you provide on every aspect of her existence and punishments. I cant wait to see what happens to her next!! (9/10)
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Lee Boudine
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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Very original presentation of a potentially erotic situation, but the text lacks focus. It rambles and lacks details; otherwise accepably written. (6/10)
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mkemse
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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Intresting concept for a story, never read a documentary before (7/10)
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