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Learning the Dance
Author: Archetype
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(Added on Nov 5, 2006)
(This month 101338 readers) (Total 153332 readers) |
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A young man is chosen to take over his father\'s business. The deal includes some interesting property |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Sirgregor261
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Aug 28, 2011 |
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I only wish there were more
(9/10)
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Falcon
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Jun 18, 2008 |
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An excellent story - agree with most of the other reviewers. Am looking forward to many more chapters. The breaking and training of Claire should be exciting indeed! The mentor/protege thread in this story adds a unique twist. Hope to see Dominic showing Michael other slave breaking techniques in additon to pain. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
archetype
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Sep 7, 2007 |
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I want to thank those of you who have been sending me emails requesting the story continue. As I said earlier, I do have a day job and it has been hard to find the time. But the story is not finished. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
archetype
(Edit) (Sep 7, 2007)
- (I know you are not supposed to rate your own stories, but hey! What do you expect?)
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| Reviewer:
euzkal
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Mar 8, 2007 |
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Mandy is the best! I hope she´s in jealous with Sengita. Maybe her new Master can make a contest.Congratulation Archetype.
My friend. Please. Don´t forget. Mandy is the true star on this Dance. And she´s ready to pass unmerciful tests of endurance with her new Master. Her marvelous tits are ready. And her mouth are ready. Nor only Sengita can be a good toilet slave. I hope Michael thinks like me. The women are very competitive, also the subs like Mandy. Congratulations.
P.S. The Devil don´t scare easily.
(10/10)
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Lia
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Mar 6, 2007 |
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Great story! I found myself wanting to be each of the slaves in the story. (9/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Mar 3, 2007 |
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Really well written and a nice story; slow, but worth the read. Thank you for sharing it! (9/10)
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archetype
(Edit) (Mar 5, 2007)
- The story does move slowly, but then if I were Michael I'd want it to last forever! :)
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La Toya
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Jan 16, 2007 |
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This is one of the best stories I have read in a very long time. Good pace. The deals of the people and rooms they are in, allows the reader to form a good picture in their mind's eye. How will you keep us reading??? I can't wait to see. To bad we cant rate this story any higher than 10. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Jan 12, 2007 |
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I am loving 'Learning the Dance'. It moves at a somewhat slow pace but no where near slow enough for you to loose interest. Just slow enough to let you try to absorb everything. Unique storyline. Bill Gates has nothing on him. The story is arousing while at the same time presenting a consistent storyline snd characters that are interesting and easy to follow. PLEASE ! tell me there is more to come !!!!!! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
archetype
(Edit) (Jan 12, 2007)
- Thank you for the review! This is a great site with a lot of stories competing for readers' attention. I was beginning to think that people had lost interest in mine.
I write the kind of story I would like to read myself, so of course it may not be for everybody, and I also try to challenge myself as a writer. At the end of the day, tho', it's the knowledge that people are reading and enjoying our stories that keeps all us authors going.
There is lots more to come, but as I think I said before I do have a day job.
Thanks again.
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| Reviewer:
Mothbrad
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Dec 23, 2006 |
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A classic in the making - as outrageous as it is outstanding and erotically challenging. Clearly, Archetype is not just an eroticist, but is a damn fine writer as well. I cannot wait for more installments. (10/10)
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MeesterX
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Nov 23, 2006 |
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Very good story, I am looking forward for next chapters. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
clx01752
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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If you are going to put scat in a story , mention it in the Story Codes. (2/10)
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archetype
(Edit) (Nov 16, 2006)
- You're absolutely right. I've requested the story codes be changed.
I.m sorry if you read something that you found offensive. That certainly was not my intention.
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Simplonrider
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Nov 13, 2006 |
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This part is really outstanding, even if the first chapters had nothing of humilitation in them, they hinted that there was more to come. I am really looking forward to read more, I hope the author will puplish soon. (10/10)
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J's blu
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Thank You so much for giving us Your story, and i will definately be looking up the other one in the archives. it is such a joy to read well written, planned, erotic, pieces.
respectfully blu (9/10)
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J's blu
(Edit) (Dec 21, 2006)
- i got to the end of the chapter and was stunned to see that i had read the two posted since i last came to this story! how could this be? i await the training of claire with eager anticipation.
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archetype
(Edit) (Jan 5, 2007)
- I'm not sure. Perhaps it was updated as you were reading it?
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J's blu
(Edit) (Jan 9, 2007)
- what i was actually meaning was that i had read all the updates so quickly and with such avid attention, i had not noticed that i had read three chapters! lol i SOOOO love stories like this one. i await the rest of this one with anticipation.
regards blu
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Good_Grip
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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An excellent story. It is easy to read and follow. The story line is first rate. As an aside, I have most of the Farrell drawings and knew what you were talking about even though the pictures did not come up in the story. Hope you use more of Farrell's imagery as you continue the story. (9/10)
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archetype
(Edit) (Nov 7, 2006)
- Thanks to everyone for reading and taking the time to write a review. The comments are very, very much appreciated, and will encourage me to get on with the next chapters. However, I still have to ask everyone to be a bit patient - I do have a day job.:)
It's too bad the Farrell drawings are not there to examine as you read the story. I do think they are works of (twisted) genius. I did submit them, but with a note to the editor that they were likely copyright. For those who don't know, the first picture Michael sees is from "Parfums de Souffrance" (translated as "Painful Flavours", but literally "Perfumes of Suffering"). If you can still find it for free, it is usually entitled "pds25" The second one is from "Obeis Sinon" ("Obey or Else") and is usually entitled "ob01"
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barbod
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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An excellent start to what promises to be an exciting tale. Well written and very intense. Now you've whetted our appetites, let's have some more (sooner rather than later!) (10/10)
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BlackIrish1495
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Icompletely enjoyed this story and cannot wait until I can read more (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dragon's muse
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Wonderfully erotic read. Marvelous character development, fine pacing. i look forward to much more from you. (9/10)
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chksng19
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Thank you for sharing what is certainly one of the finest erotic tales to grace the screen of my computer in long years. Professionally written, grammatically perfect, well developed character and lots of suspense. I certainly hope that you choose to grant us further chapters... and many of them. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Spitman
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Quite an extraordinarily well written story. It is intriguing, pacy and intensely erotic, but especially, utterly compulsive reading.
This compares well with the best published writing of its kind, past and recent. I hope we will see more work by this author. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Nov 5, 2006 |
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good start, where to from here (6/10)
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