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The story of Erin
Author: tightpet
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(Added on Oct 21, 2006)
(This month 48706 readers) (Total 56196 readers) |
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this takes place before A Story about 2 slaves |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Nov 6, 2006 |
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Where is the story? (3/10)
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- Replied by:
tightpet
(Edit) (Nov 7, 2006)
- this is only the beginning of the story, i am having some editing issues with the next part.
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Oct 21, 2006 |
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My recommendation is to go back to school and learn basic sentence construction. The run-on sentences, spelling errors and lack of punctuation completely destroyed what might, with a little more effort and attention to detail, have been a fairly decent plot. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Oct 21, 2006 |
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What is this? not a story, it's too short and does little to hold to the telling of an event or a chain of events.
While I'm sure it is meant to be a part of the other tale, it might have been better to have written it as a "flashback" as an update to the story rather than to post it standing alone.
Oh. And the plural of eye is eyes, not eye's. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
tightpet
(Edit) (Oct 21, 2006)
- this is only the begnning of a new story, that happens before the other one, keep coming back to read more.
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