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Annas Ordeal
Author: Thorn1
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(Added on Aug 11, 2006)
(This month 24687 readers) (Total 55806 readers) |
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A short prelude to a torture scene |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 4, 2008 |
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need more story to real review it fairly to short a start
It appear as a good story, I hope you plan to add more (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Aug 15, 2006 |
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Very good description, comming directly to the point. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Aug 12, 2006 |
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This introduction does not waste time onnonessential details, but comes right to the point of what is going to happen. It raisesd the readers expectations to a high level wanting to attend the questioning.
I think that the students age of 17 detracts from the story. It would be better if she were of legal age. At 19 or 20 she would be a student at the University.
I am waiting chapter 2 anxiously and hopefully the girl will celebrate her birthday by then.. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 11, 2006 |
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A very short beginning, setting a familiar scene. This plot line is used frequently, and needs some special flair to tell a fresh tale. While handled fairly well to this point, the next segment will tell us if you will create with that flair.
Some errors; names not capitalized, incorrect words. An editor or proof-reader would help.
Further segments could lead to a higher score. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Von Schmiser
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Aug 11, 2006 |
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Very good begining. Sets the stage nicely. It would appear you are someone who takes the word torture in your description seriously and means more than a hard face slap, and lips service. Please.. more. I await anxiously (9/10)
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