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The Charm
Author: Twister
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(Added on Jul 31, 2006)
(This month 9024 readers) (Total 17829 readers) |
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one mans fight to find myself |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
devilsmagic99
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Dec 29, 2006 |
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I enjoyed it, although I was confused at some of the transitions. I would have liked a little more description of the characters emotions. But overall I really liked it. (7/10)
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RoseKrystal
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Oct 22, 2006 |
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I would love to read more from you (7/10)
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cariad(CC)
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Aug 7, 2006 |
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Well done, a lovely sensitive story. Perhaps because I was in at the birth my eyes skimmed over the proof reading errors.
When you post your next, it would be worth asking one of the proof reading types in chat to check it through for you.
I am looking forward to those future posts, and thank you for writing this one. (7/10)
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ElectricBadger
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Aug 7, 2006 |
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Good story concept, although a bit confusing at times and the problems with punctuation, grammar, and spelling were frustratingly distracting. Touch up the mechanics and it'll be a really nice piece. (6/10)
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jip
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Aug 5, 2006 |
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Not bad. Well told (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 1, 2006 |
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Not a bad story at all, Twister. Pretty well told, and a sweet way of telling it. But it needs to be PROOF READ before it is posted. If you maul and press something (like bread dough or nipples) you knead it. You can't 'kneed' it; that would mean you pushed a knee into it. Many others, very distracting.
Also, using ..... to end every sentence makes it somewhat etherial in the narration, but gets very old when every one is done that way.
You might consider finding someone to help edit it for you. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Aug 1, 2006 |
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I liked the story very much and hope you will write others. (7/10)
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