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Candi’s Introduction
Author: cissykandi
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(Added on Jul 12, 2006)
(This month 55972 readers) (Total 78404 readers) |
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My first time where my fantasy of submitting to a women turned to reality. I have changed the names of my mistress and her roommates. |
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| Reviewer:
Blackbird
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Jul 15, 2006 |
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Absolutely wonderful subject material here, I loved it, but a few critiques, if I may. Number one, watch your grammar. Most of the story lacks the proper punctuation it needs, i.e. commas. Number two, I love the gusto you have just throwing in all kinds of wonderful things that get done to you by all the Women, but please, DESCRIBE it more! When She throws you over her lap, you could, and should take more than a couple sentences worth of time describing the feelings and sensations in the experience. Well, that's all. Wonderful stuff with really good potential if you brush up your attention to detail. (7/10)
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