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In Trouble Again
Author: slave Debbie
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(Added on May 31, 2006)
(This month 50081 readers) (Total 57057 readers) |
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slave Debbie was sent to the Academy to become a better slave but has been very disobedient. Poking around in places she did not belong. She is sent to the office for punishment |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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May 31, 2006 |
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I guess I like stories that give more information on what is going on in the character's heads. First person stories are usually poorly constructed as is this one. I think if you were to try to rewrite it in third person, you might have a better story. (4/10)
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