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Conversion of Jasmine
Author: James Smith
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(Added on May 8, 2006)
(This month 82234 readers) (Total 123324 readers) |
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Jasmine, a beautiful young girl who loves sex, is taught to crave for a more sadistic extreme love. Forniphilia. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Escritor
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Oct 31, 2008 |
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I think every one who's rated this story has said something true about it. I also think things happenned too quickly, and more detail could have been given. A few grammar and spelling errors could be ommitted if you'd use a writing processor (like MS Word) before posting.
Still, a very nice story, there aren't many forniphilia stories on this site, and each one is welcomed. I hope you write how she did on her very own idea: the table. And I'm looking forward to read some new stories from you as well (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
NCbarbara
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Jul 15, 2008 |
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A definite hip-grinder as I wished I was her strapped to the pole. And I love the table idea! Thank you SO much. I do agree with previous raters that the story needs to be fleshed out - things happened too quickly. Also grammar and punctuation needs attention. Please write a part2 - the next day *grins* (9/10)
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bmtphoenix
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Sep 6, 2007 |
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Excellent job, I love it. I'd like to see more! (9/10)
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tbear4759
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Apr 30, 2007 |
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some spelling, grammar, punctuation issues. (5/10)
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dennisthmn
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Dec 7, 2006 |
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Whens the next chapter? (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ThisGirl
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May 10, 2006 |
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H Dean and the others have hit it on the nose.
This story has amazing potential- please nurture it and make it bloom to its fullest!
Some great lines: "'...it’s your ideas I want, not your consent.'" and "...she was in some sort of fetish therapy session..."
I think the description of transforming Jasmine into a lampshade (wonderful idea!) needs more clarity- unless you wanted to surprise the readers, in which case, less details would have done better.
And finally a story with some forniphilia! Yay! (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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May 10, 2006 |
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Good story. The "submission" went somewhat to quickly (only in a few hours) (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 9, 2006 |
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I have to agree with the others who have posted their reviews (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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May 9, 2006 |
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I like the premise and basic story. Unfortunately, so far as it went, it was under-developed. This tale should have had a tremendous amount of emotional insight that it did not. I suspect that the author wanted to get to his vision and suffered from a lack of patience - he got to the destination on time but forgot to look at the scenery. I would really like to see this story re-written, emotionally fleshed out and slowed down. I suspect it would turn a better than average read into an excellent read. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 9, 2006 |
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like the general idea of the story (6/10)
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chksng19
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May 8, 2006 |
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Not a bad tale; more insight to the woman's feelings and thoughts would help. And perhaps a little more of what he was doing while she was imprisoned. (6/10)
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