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Drive-thru Abduction
Author: bondage_man69
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(Added on Apr 28, 2006)
(This month 11364 readers) (Total 23173 readers) |
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Fast food employee gets kidnapped and made a sex slave. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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Rating: (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
(Edit) |
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May 10, 2011 |
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Firstly let me state that H dean is correct only a fool would have a blindfold instead of a heavy duty cloth bag, a total idiot would use a leather blindfold as they are can be too stiff to cover the eyes properly. i was taught, and discovered, that a bag would go over the head more easily and quickly and it would also help muffle sound.
Secondly a steak knife is an ok weapon but if an amateur wants to frighten someone then a Bowie knife is probably the best, pesronally i prefered to use a kris (then again that was what i was trained to use and was the local knife). i understand that plastic ties have now replaced the use of handcuffs, but i think that could be down to personal choice.
Thirdly when we get to the point of the kidnapper getting out of the car you wrote "open it up" which is in present tense. Everything before and after is in past tense. i know i am being pedantic, but then again you have been overly nasty in your critisism of other writers.
Oh yes in at least two of your reviews you wrote "aweful" now i always thought the word was awful, but i could be mistaken ..... as would my dictionary.
Other than that the story IS rushed and has been told many times and a hell of a lot better. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 10, 2009 |
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I would have gone for a '4' score. But seeing what an arse bondage_man has been in his 'reviews' and the slight chance that bondage_bear (how subtle) is the same dude, I decided to give bondage_man a cookie of his own dough.
Oh, and the story 'sounded' like it was written in a fever and a hurry, while taking a crap on a McDonald's toilet. It exhumes juvenile wishfull thinking and shows absolutely no insight in kidnap technicalities whatsoever.
Spelling was nice, tho.
JJ (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Dryhill
(Edit) (May 10, 2011)
- lol.
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| Reviewer:
jip
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May 15, 2006 |
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very poor attempt (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
bondage_man69
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May 12, 2006 |
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bravo! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (May 15, 2006)
- Heureusement que le ridicule ne tue pas!
- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (May 15, 2006)
- Heureusement que le ridicule ne tue pas!
- Replied by:
Dryhill
(Edit) (May 10, 2011)
- It is very clever to give ten out of ten to yourself.
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 30, 2006 |
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I have to agree with H Dean's review. Should you add any other chapter, I may raise my review (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
bondage_bear
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Apr 29, 2006 |
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I thought this was an very good story. The storyline is interesting. I am hopeful the author adds other parts. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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This is a rather well worn story theme. Nonetheless, some writers can pull it off, while others cannot. Amongst the reasons I failed to enjoy this story was the "kidnap kit". Not only did it seem a bit ridiculous but the contents were not efficient. Not if the kit's main purpose is to facilitate a kidnapping. For instance, a steak knife is not a particularly handy sort of knife. Neither is a leather blindfold - a sack is far more efficient in the rush of a kidnapping. As with the "kidnap kit" the remainder of the story is not well thought and has a junior highschool sort of feel, both stylistically and grammatically. Finally, it felt rather rushed, which may account for much of this story's short comings.
**A quick investigation found this to be this authors first posted story. My first thought is that this was, in fact, rushed before given a proper edit. So, slow down and give your story a little more time. Then go back and edit it. I promise it will allow you to see what you didn't see the first time around. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
bondage_man69
(Edit) (May 2, 2006)
- and what are you, some kind of kidnap expert? if you don't like the fact my bad guy has a kidnap kit and it's contents don't meet your standards, tough!
- Replied by:
H Dean
(Edit) (May 3, 2006)
- I see you take honest critisism well.
- Replied by:
Dryhill
(Edit) (May 10, 2011)
- Amazing how someone who regularly gives one as a rating and only one or two word comments can not take a fair comment.
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