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My new doggy slave
Author: Maarten Witteveen
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(Added on Apr 27, 2006)
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I met a girl the other day and started talking about role-playing, and this is a report of what happened when she came over one afternoon. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Feb 10, 2009 |
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The synopsys and intro line are a wee bit mystifying. I know fore sure that Robert De Niro and Meryl Streep had lots of talks about role-playing, but I bet he never collared her and made her bark all around his Canal Street apartment. On the other hand, who knows..?
But you get the point. Or you don't. What I mean is, there's a difference between hinting at some role-playing and then throwing the woman off a deep end the size of the Matterhorn's North flank.
Okay. The Matterhorn is a rather steep mountain in the Alps, on the Swiss/Italian border. Just to wipe that frown off yer face.
Back to the story. Couldn't find anything wrong with it, grammatical- and spellingwise. Maybe Maarten already edited it.
Nevertheless, I moderately liked it. Moderately, because I prefer longer, more elaborate works. But this is good, no matter what folks say.
JJ (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bondage_man69
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May 10, 2006 |
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I hate to admit it, but H Dean is right about this story. I am wondering where H Dean's stories are. He/she seems so critical about everone's work, yet I find none of his/her stories here> Hmmm. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (May 11, 2006)
- Bondage man, I do not always share opinion with H Dean,(as you can see) but whatever, he gives full motivation and explanation, which a correct attitude. On the other hand I believe that "being so critical about everone's work" is not really the argument you should use. 90% of all your reviews are just a 1 or a 2 and the highest you ever gave was 4. Mostly no comments or very rude ones. Just have a tought about this.
- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (May 11, 2006)
- Bondage man, I do not always share opinion with H Dean,(as you can see) but whatever, he gives full motivation and explanation, which a correct attitude. On the other hand I believe that "being so critical about everone's work" is not really the argument you should use. 90% of all your reviews are just a 1 or a 2 and the highest you ever gave was 4. Mostly no comments or very rude ones. Just have a tought about this.
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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Perhaps a little short, but suspect there is more following. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Apr 27, 2006 |
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Poor story construction and grammatical deficiencies abound in this, less than interesting, tale. I suspect that this tale was never edited or reviewed after its initial composition and before being published. I do suspect that English is not the native language of this author. Even taking that into account, the story remains very unentertaining to this reader. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
sub_dom_maarten
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2006)
- Thanks for your comment, and yes I'm from Holland but I didn't expect it to be this bad honestly. Well in a month I'll have the time and I'll get to work on editing it. Thanks again for the criticism and hopefully you'll check on it some time when i have redone it and hopefully you'll be more pleased with it.
- Replied by:
H Dean
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2006)
- I will tell you that many of my own tales start out to be quite poor. However, I generally give them a fair gestation period before I post them. I find that a fresh read, some weeks later, tends to catch things I completely screwed up on. I will read your next story (if I see it) and promise to give this story another shot if you give it a fresh edit.
Dean
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jip
(Edit) (Apr 28, 2006)
- Hello Maarten, op deze site zijn er spijtig genoeg een paar mensen zoals deze die het leuk vinden om anders-taligen op een bepaalde manier de les te spellen. Deze is er zo een van. Trek je het niet teveel aan. Ik en vele anderen lezen de verhalen voor de inhoud en niet voor het aantal spellings fouten.
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H Dean
(Edit) (Apr 28, 2006)
- As usual, Jip, you miss the point. It is the content which is important. However, the manner in which the content is presented is just as important. Excellent stories can be hidden behind a wall of errors which make the reading impossible. As an author, I would want these errors pointed out to me. Consequently, I point them out to other authors. You, on the other hand, would rather crusade against those of us to do give honest critical reviews. Grow up.
- Replied by:
jip
(Edit) (Apr 30, 2006)
- Dean "honest critical reviews" is for everybody "subjective", even for you.
- Replied by:
H Dean
(Edit) (May 1, 2006)
- I was refering to your comments, Jip, regarding my review.
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