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Bond of Destiny
Author: YamiNoHikari
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(Added on Apr 26, 2006)
(This month 29823 readers) (Total 37101 readers) |
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The complex storyline about the secret of the world. Hikaru got the crystal which has unique powers and he became the key to reveal the secret. What will wait for him in the journey (tipical Hentai-RPG) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 1, 2008 |
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now flow, terrible formatting, not sure when you plan to make the needed adjustments, but it is very hard to read
Time and more stories will improve your work (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Tsurmon
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May 24, 2006 |
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Alright, you're getting better. So far, the biggest complaint is with the grammar. Nearly every sentence is wrong and it doesn't flow at all. It's not basic stuff like commas and whatnot, but mostly in the odd phrasing and uses of tense. I'm going to assume that english isn't your first language? (3/10)
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- Replied by:
YamiNoHikari
(Edit) (Apr 28, 2006)
- Er... in my notepad (txt version), it do fine. I don't know why it turned out like this. I'll update it to fix it and post another chapter. thank you. Oh yes, from now on, there will be pixtures also. Thank you for reviewing.
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