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Prisoner Inerrogation
Author: Von Schmiser
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(Added on Mar 10, 2006)
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Interrogations of political dissidents in a fictional country, ruled by a despotic tyrant and his followers. Lori Beth and her friends learn the hard way that the horror stories of abomiable tortures were not fiction... |
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bitter boy
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Oct 27, 2007 |
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I like this style. It's over the top and creative. I don't understand why all those blow job scenes are in there. But hey, I can't write anything this good so I'm not really complainig. (9/10)
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slave_george
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Excellent to say the very least. I look forward to reading each new chapter. (10/10)
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Jemmasub
(Edit) (Apr 17, 2007)
- Hello Sir, Some time ago I contacted you to say how much I enjoyed your writing style, and how erotic I found it. You offered to include me by name in your story. The level of excitement for me of course went up ten fold. You are now at chapter 32 of Prisoner Interrogation and each time I read a new chapter or even half a chapter the more arousing it becomes. You are a truly fascinating author, creative, exciting and imaginative. Your erotic writings have excited me and I am sure many other readers for years. Please dont stop! You are once again responsible for the quivering wreck that is typing this message to you, and if you still have my email address, I would dearly love to hear from you again.
Yours
Jemma. . . .
jemmasuk32@yahoo.co.uk
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tantal
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Nov 16, 2006 |
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Nice work. I love the setup of both this and Inquisition which matches hardcore torture with very stubborn victims. Somehow that makes it more immediate and exciting.
Some of the torture is a bit repetitive, and I also wouldn't mind a little more story as padding between the intense parts. More action for Raul (or a new male character who's parallel to Jemma - a leader, and very determined not to give up secrets) would be great. (Similarly, would have loved to see the Countess try to extract a male confession in The Inquisitor.)
Also, I'm sure the misspelling in the title has been mentioned. Could be keeping the story from showing up in searches. (8/10)
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Travis
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Nov 12, 2006 |
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When a story starts out with: "NNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" I'm done. (3/10)
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bitter boy
(Edit) (Oct 27, 2007)
- ROFL
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Cordoza
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Firstly, I appreciate that the author writes for himself, therefore this comment only reflects my likes and dislikes of the material.
Initially this story looked most attractive to me but has degenerated into repetitive situations and acts. I would class the interrogation methods used as mild, the sex as soft core and the treatment of the prisoners akin to a Vincent Price send up.
As I said, this only reflects my own literary likes/dislikes and is in no way a criticism of the excellent quality of your writing. You are happy with what you write and that's okay with me. I'm just looking for genuine no-holds-barred sadism, this is way too soft for me.
And yes, I can write exactly what I want to read, myself, but reading one's own work is not as much fun as reading someone else's... Just can't win:)
Keep up the good work, it's still a welcome change from the mostly softer core stories here:) (5/10)
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Jemmasub
(Edit) (Apr 17, 2007)
- Hello Sir, I have found your three stories and am slowly reading them now. . . Poor Simone!
Jemma. . .
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carlo
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Aug 20, 2006 |
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STORY MOTHER SON.
Compliments for your job, approximately your story – fantasy, I think a particular scenery for you stories.
In South America torture centers, a beatiful women of 40 - 45 years old is questioned in presence of her own adolescent son.
Reading the documents of human associations rights, I have written article about real tortures cases, happened in tortures centers of South America, during the military dictatorship years 70 – 80.
The photos and the text of my article are not imagination but they describe cases really happened in a center of torture. Real it are the types of torture described, the victims' reactions, the the confessions of victims and their jailers. All this is written in documents of human associations rights.
Every form of human perversion is possible in a torture center, a universe of pain and human evil.
In Argentina, Uruguay, Chile in 70 – 80 years, very people was tortured, after to be kidnapping in them house; many of these people were women.
In Argentina, nobody was immune. Male and female; young and old, babies and teenagers; pregnant women, students, workers, lawyers, journalists, scientists, artists, and teachers; Argentine citizens and citizens of other countries; nuns and priests, progressive members of religious orders-all swelled the ranks of the disappeared.
Of all the dramatic situations in clandestine prisons, nothing can compare to those family groups who were tortured, often together. Brutalizing a mother in front of her son and torturing a man in front of his wife were favorite ways of trying to make the women talk. The entire affective family world, constructed over the years with very difficulty collapses. This is a special technique of torture within the title of psychological torture, it is named ‘family torture’.
In much in torture centers and in police stations, very women of 35 - 45 years old were questioned in presence of their adolescent sons. This very perverse interrogation method was a method often used when the women were attractive and her son a adolescent boy.
First because, the jailers are perverse and sadistic people,
Second because this interrogation method it is very effective, a terrible psychological torture: for every mother, the fact of being naked in front of a his son and suffer to sexual tortures is a terrible shock; besides every mother knows, how much this experience to be traumatizing to her adolescent son.
Silvia Martinez Basso a woman journalist and member of important association of human rights wrote this about the technical of mother-son interrogatory: In this perverse form of questioning the woman is submitted to tortures more psychological than physics. In particularly it is employed a method of psychological torture named “small talk in distress”.
The woman is put in front to her own son, if not already naked yet, the woman is forced to strip to assume obscene and embarrassing positions; while talking to her, the interrogator puts her in distress: verbally abused she, fondling her breasts and her vagina. She is questionig in this manner about one hours, after to give her a deeper emotional shock, she is bound in a very uncomfortable manner and she is submitted to a slow and minute cavity search, vaginal inspection and edema.
These are the real testimonies of some victims:
Maria S., a beautiful women of forty five years old, psychologist in Buenos Aries University, wife of a important member of opposition party, was kidnappings together of her son Pablo a adolescent boy, student in second years of college.
Tell Maria with great shame about her tragic experience: << I was forced to obey to their orders why they threatened to torture my son, they poor me in a very obscene position: naked with the legs fall open, exposing my sex to the men, and to my adolescent son....I would have preferred to die rather than to put in that position in front my son to me. I am a woman much modest, never I undressed me in presence of my son....You cannot imagine the shame that one mother tries in that situation.... I implored the jailers to give mine me dressed...>>.
I was motionless for fear and embarrassment while two young boys fondled my breasts, touched my vagina and verbally abused me: << You are a teacher in university, you never wear panties when you teach class. You like to sit in front of the room and spread you legs, so all the boys can see you pussy and in particular in front you son......Look Pablo,...like you mother show her pussy.....Are you is excite for the mommy show?>>.
I felt horror and shame for this obscene act in front of my son, but every reaction was impossible: my life and the life of my son, was in power of these criminals.
I remember that terrible moment. I found the strength to tell him: <<Please Pablo...please don't listened any of this.........We will survive>>. I said this crying.
All this can be defined torture. The psychological torture can be more effective than that physics, in particolar the cavity search.
Maria rememder: I was belted down to a wooden platform with me legs held open. Mercilessly I was investigate in my intimates parts in front of my son and he was forced to watch...>> During the body search a men asked me: <<Are you embarrassment? You son see all >>. I cried silently because I didn't want to frighten my son. I heard a lot of shame, and I was desperate thinking about the shock that my son was trying.
Pablo the son of Maria tells with great shame and embarrassmentremember: <<I was forced to watch my mother interrogatory...... She was submitted to vaginal insertions and electro tortures……..She was deprived of hope and she did not have courage to watch to me.... …..The member of torture team they often repeated to me:<< You must be excited, when you see you mother questioning. If you are excited, We stop to torture She>>.
This is how much it really happened during a questioning, in particularly real it are the methods of torture used and the reactions victims here described.
The psychological tortures was not the only form of tortures to which to woman is submitted in presence of her adolescent son. In many cases to the psychological torture it followed that physics torture: breast tortures (breast press and breast hangings), electric shock low voltage for nipples and vagina, wooden pony, caning, bastinado (caning on feet shoes), insertions of toys (dildo, pump dildo, vibrator) in vagina and anus. These physics tortures are painful but they don't provoke in the woman you damn permanent, because it are type to low intensity. In the cases of “family torture” the psychological torture is more effective than that physics torture.
The boy is forced to assist to the questioning of his own mother, while a warder slowly masturbated he. The warder don’t get dirty the hands with the sperm of boys, wound the sex of the boys in slip or pantyhose, of mother boy. The underclothes that the mother of the boy, had been forced to get away or that we had torn from her during the questioning.
The boys try a strong sense of shame and anguish however happened and they are lowers the head and often cries; this is the more orrible and embarrassing aspect of this terrible experience.
Erection and ejaculation it are common physiological reactions that escape the control of every adolescent boy especially in drammatic situations as that just described. This happens because in age of puberty the organism of every adolescent boy is submitted to strong sexual hormonal secretion, and therefore it is very sensitive to every form of sexual stimulus; moreover the torture team, creates in the victim boy a relationship among sexual stimulus and cessation of the mother pain: the various forms of torture physics to which the woman is submitted are interrupted when the boy ejaculates.
Perverse this way operated to has the purpose to upset the mind of the victims.
In Argentina torture centre every forms of violence and perverse acts were practicable, even the incest.
B. Shaw a psychologist told: “In torture centre, forced mother and son in incest acts was possible, because the victims were exhausted, after weeks of torture physique and psychological, for then every resist was impossible.
For understand this type of situation is necessary reflect about the victims, then physique and psychological condition.
The mother and son are under blackmail, In these desperate situation, every mother accept every perverse acts, for save herself and her son from pain and dead.
I believe important a very realistis scenery and story. More realistic photos, video or story, more it are exciting for the human mind.
Many people don't speak of these imaginations because they feel shame, but this imagination is very frequent, it is the dark side of our mind.
Real protagonists.
The son, he is adolescent boy in age of puberty, student of college.
The mother she is a women of 40 – 45 years old, you do describe a real mother that you know: name, physical aspect, age, habits, job, as she is dressed normally, in this way the story is more realistic. You can describe your mother if you have fantasy about she.
Realistic emotions.
The mother: Fear, pain, embarassament, because she is interrogate in front her son.
The son: Fear and horror , he see his mother under torture and he can not react, because is tied up a chair and gagged. Embarassament, for his physiological reactions……..
The woman is dressed as the classic mother. She doesn't wears erotic underwear or latex, it isn't realistic. She wears normal clothes: skirt and blouse; simple underwear: bras, brief, pantyhose. She hasn't tatoo
Other sceneries are possible around mother-son stories:
During WWII Gestapo officers a woman and mans questioned a woman of 40 years old in presence of her teen-ager son.
Mother & her adolescent son are held captives by a local gang. The gang uses the mother as a sexual play toy, forces her to prostitute herself for them or to work as actress of porno film, and even makes her have sex with her son and his friends for their business and pleasure.
A teen-ager boy discovers that his own mother works as actress of porno film. The woman to do this dirty job because she is blackmailed by a gang of usurers.
What do you think about this? Are you able to write a history with this scenery
Best regars Carlo
(7/10)
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wildcard73
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i'm liking the new visitors, especially Raul. can't wait to see what new tortures await him. great story! (9/10)
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Borek
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Jun 13, 2006 |
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The chapters 16 and 17 are the best. With Tiffany that suffers unarmed and Jemma that
she invites Si Lun to torture her stronger.
Some ideas:
new tortures:
- ice, cold, freezer-cell
- to tie with barbed wire
- leeches
- mice, cockroaches, larvas, Scorpios, spiders, worms on the naked body
- to inflate belly with water or presser of air
- to hang for the feet with head in water
- to tighten around rope belly, more and more narrow. pain every breath
- on the floor and stamped on on face, breast, belly
- dam in a cage narrow flood of thorns (her has to be immovable)
a new character:
- name: Sabrina
- years 23
- student and swimmer
- friend of Tiffany
- it loves: to exhibit her body
- it hates: the violence, the slave traders
- it is SPONTANEOUSLY delivered in exchange for the liberty of Tiffany
it goes to the police in impermeable, if it removes it "I am unarmed" and she remains
with only bra and loin-cloth in front of everybody.
- it feels him guilty for the capture of Tiffany because she has invited her to in the
country of the dictator (it is convinced be worth the maltreatments)
- she doesn't know anything of the rebels, but it also invents to be taken to the place
of Tiffany
- images for your fantasy:
http://www.radiodavid.net/elisabetta_canalis/foto11.htm
http://www.radiodavid.net/elisabetta_canalis/foto1.htm
http://www.radiodavid.net/elisabetta_canalis/foto8.htm
http://img228.exs.cx/my.php?loc=img228&image=elisabettacanalisuhq042zi.jpg
http://img228.exs.cx/my.php?loc=img228&image=elisabettacanalisuhq142rz.jpg
She have perfect body for torture!
- belly and navel of a woman are very sexy: torture its more
- Lori has been tortured too much little
- it enlivens the history with events that excuse new tortures: attempt of escape, a
confession that reveals an infiltrator girl in the servitude of the dictator
- torture a girl during a party in the building of the dictator to amuse the elegant
guests (9/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Jul 14, 2006)
- Thank you for the fine review. I will keep the suggestions on file for future use. Lori hasn't really begun to suffer enough tortures. She is on the electric rack now and I plan to do abominable things to her. Another character is a good ploy. We certainly won't let Tiffany go though, even if it is promised. She is too good a screamer and begger for mercy which she will not get. It is nice to hear there are sadists like me out there who revel in the torture of females. It would be nice if they would voice their appreciation and offer suggestions like you did.
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Borek2
(Edit) (Aug 10, 2006)
- I Am Borek. I non found old acconut, sorry.
I am happy to have stimulated your imagination.
Obviously Tiffany won't be freed and the sacrifice of Sabrina will be useless (this is very amusing).
Since the new character "Sabrina" you are liked, I give you other ideas on her.
- It doesn't like her to be tortured, but she is prepared to also suffer to save Tiffany
- And' proud of her own body. To be naked in front of the guards excites her. For this it is constituted in bikini.
To tease the others with her own beauty amuses her. "You want to perform a body search me? ". "you Want that I dress again me? For me it is not a problem to be naked". "Handcuff me pure. You can put also me a leash if you ago pleasure". after having been done handcuff it draws near to the guard "you are satisfied now? ".
SAbrina is the classical unselfish girl that makes him chain naked to protest against the hunting.
But with the bravery and her erotic charge of a dancer of lap dance.
- when it is constituted she knows that she will be abused. but it doesn't imagine how much the torturers are perverse.
- It kneels in front of the torturer and begging to be arrested
- it hopes to extract him taking her some lash and then pretending a confession.
(naturally it won't go so and it will suffer worse tortures of her nightmares)
- Her is a liar girl. mind saying to be a rebel. mind saying that she will confess in exchange for the liberty of
Tiffany. under torture mind still revealing some false names of rebels.
Her is a liar girl.
- delivery her own body to the torturers but not the her volition. Not her bend easily.
"you can make to sweat me and to groan for a week, but I won't tell you nothing" (says while it is arching the I cover as to offer it to the torturer)
- it feels him guilty for the fate of Tiffany. For this it is convinced to bring upon herself the torture.
- And' very astute. very more than all the other victims. try to deceive the torturers in every way.
- when it understands that Tiffany will never come liberty, tantalize the torturers so that to attract their anger on herself also to avoid that Tiffany is still tortured.
"I am ready to suffer your most monstrous perversions. But she leaves alone Tiffany!"
and other photos of the body to be imagined while you are writing:
http://www.vipintv.com/italia/e/elisabettacanalis/gq0201/0006_Elisabetta_Canalis_GQ_Maggio_3.jpg
http://www.vipintv.com/italia/e/elisabettacanalis/gq0201/0006_Elisabetta_Canalis_GQ_Maggio_8.jpg
http://www.vipintv.com/italia/e/elisabettacanalis/mag/2004259vip_canalis3.jpg
http://www.allcelebrity.it/Canalis/159.jpg
http://www.vipintv.com/italia/e/elisabettacanalis/mag/canalis_gente200326.jpg
http://www.vipintv.com/italia/e/elisabettacanalis/2003/10.jpg
This charatter girl idea excites you?
I hope that you will introduce soon Sabrina in your history!!
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- I am convinced that an accurate characterization of the victims both the key of a good history. Too histories
they tell only of a beautiful howling girl.
And' important to show as different victims they have a different personality, different fears, a different way to react
to the torture. You have done a good job differentiating psychology and motivations of Tiffany, Lori and Jemma.
continuous this way.
Another very important point is the dialogue between torturer and victim.
From the dialogue the psychology of the protagonists emerges. And' important that the torturer threatens, humble, sneer, derides, the victims. A torturer that laughs in front of the really cruel suffering of the victims.
Also the dialogues of the victim are very important. It has to be us a correct equilibrium among, refusal to speak, supplications, challenge to the torturer, lies to be saved herself and naturally it howls.
Here are some meaningful sentences for the victim:
- you will have to pass on my body
- that's all what you know how to do?
- enough! I will be your maid your slave!
- leave her alone! fault to me!
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dumboldon
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May 27, 2006 |
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Smooth writing, and makes sense within the context...wish I could do s well... (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (May 27, 2006)
- Thanks for the review. I write what is interesting and exciting. Give it a try. Write what you think about doing or watching. It"s all imagination and fantasy in any case.
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kemosabe
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I would have liked a little more sublety as opposed to the all-out slam-bang torture. We have no clue as to why the girl was arrested other than they suspect her of treason. Seems rather harsh without some corraborating evidence.
Still the theme is popular but I agree that a spell checker along with a grammer review would probably raise my rating.
OK, I give! After reading the lates episodes, I must agree with other readers that this certainly satisfies the most reticent admirer of BDSM. The author has done a superb job of describing the prisoners' agonies. Keep up the good work!
(8/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2006)
- Thanks for taking the time for the review....
From my experience those two bit tyrants didnt need even this much rumor to do as much or more to unfortunate people whom they did not like or who spoke so much as a sentence counter to the regieme.....too..this IS fiction and certain license is usual.....Please forgive the grammer....Miss Bickle didnt like my work in school either.....but then this is written to enjoy the story..not for literay prize or acclaim....sit back and try to enjoy it....if it is that offensive just pass on by.....
I have no professional proof reader so I must rely on my obviously inadequate talents .....hopefully I will improve....no gaurantees tho...remember too..no good deed goes unpunished....
Again thanks for taking the time......most folks do not......without critique we have no gain.....
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (May 6, 2006)
- Thanks so much for your re-review. Unfortunately not many readers take the time for a first review let alone a second. Your first one encouraged me to try harder. (spell checker for one thing)..It's nice to know things are getting better, (not for the ladies of the story happily). Thanks again it's much appreciated.
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pollycoventry
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Apr 27, 2006 |
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great!!!!!!!!!!!!! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 27, 2006)
- Thank you very much. I'm glad i hit the center ring with you. More is coming. It is gratifying to know people enjoy my stories. Again thank you for taking time to review.
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DemonLady
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Apr 16, 2006 |
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I liked the story very much. I am a sadist and I do love to hear female screams. Humiliation, rape and torture are all good in this type of story. Keeping her from cumming but keeping her on edge is fun. I like the electro torture, it makes them move so interestingly. One thing.... did I just not see Chapter five or did it go from four to six intentionally. Keep up the good work and if you are using word use the spell check then others will not tell you of spelling errors.... as they did with my story.
Just read the last two editions..... Great work..Write faster please...... grins and as always MORE torture........ lol (9/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 19, 2006)
- Thank you for the kind words. You surely are a kindred spirit......5 is in there somewheres....maybe i forgot to number it...sorry....did you ever write something down and feel its spelled wrong but cant see what it is......seems I do it consistantley....but unintentionally..please forgive....I hope it doesnt detract from your enjoyment.
Thank you again for taking time to review....
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 19, 2006)
- I just got Chapter 5 back.....error in BDSM addy....I resent it....Enjoy dear lady
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isabeau
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Apr 13, 2006 |
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yikes again.. i take it you are the same writer of the other prisoner interrogation series? wow this one was so cruel in nature, i was wondering how much torture they could take before dying..fantastic, yet i cringed again at all the torture endured by these people.. (8/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 14, 2006)
- You are so kind in reviewing. Yes indeed I am the author of Inquisition. I will offer other like stories,(if I ever finish these two,) Just be glad you did not live then or in these countries. Thank you again.
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Jemmasub
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10 isn't high enough. A fantastic story, if people are criticising spelling then they aren’t getting into the story enough. No criticisms at all, every chapter takes me a couple of visits to read the whole thing, somehow I keep getting distracted, imagining its me! Poor Lori Beth, will she ever get free?
More Please Sir.
Jemma. . . .
PS I did a spell Czech on this beef four I posted it.
(10/10)
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2006)
- Thank you Jemma, I hope you are enjoying your adventure. I like ur PS specialy...;-)
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susankarl
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I enjoy this theme and a lovely interrogator getting hot as she tortures a pretty captive can turn me on whatever the strength of narrative or grammatical correctness. It is exciting, naughty, erotic, fairly cruel, and I want to know what happens next.
I read your reviews and it amazes and amuses me how people criticize your spelling and do not check their own words. One reviewer of my "Cellar" story was upset that I said "arse" rather than "arce". The word followed by "hole" springs to mind. As to the characters........the girl is pretty, she's been accused of spying and perverts are torturing her, partly because their position of power means they can. So who needs characterization? It's a sexy sadistic story. Great. That's what I chose to read. Write on! Susan. (7/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 24, 2006)
- Thank you susan...I agree..Grammar and spelling be damned..Though I really do try to correct the spelling gaffs, I just miss some. Is the story enjoyable?Thanks for taking time to encourge.
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heycarrieanne
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I guess I like stories with more plot and less screaming. Also, you might want to read up on punctuation. This is an elipse...not the multiple periods and commas you use. (5/10)
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castle2001
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Mar 20, 2006 |
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The plot is transparent. The characters are invisible. The verbiage is obscure.
Otherwise not too bad for a first try. Next time save the file prior to submitting it.
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- Replied by:
Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 21, 2006)
- Thank you for taking the time....Im glad to have made your day!
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DemonLady
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- think we know who is transparent...... I believe he told you in the beginning the author writes for himself..... don't read it if it bothers you so much.
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a 10/10 wow for you.....at last someone putting some teeth in the term torture and extreme....when do we get more I hope? (10/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 31, 2006)
- Thank you kindly dear lady.I couldnt have said it better myself.
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A well told story. The constant screams, though real in small increments, seem to distract from the flow of the story.
Rounding out very well with more chapters... looking forward to more to come! (8/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 14, 2006)
- Thank you for your review and rating...Awfully sorry if the screaming seems a bit heavy handed,but,wouldnt We be doing the same?,just as much?,maybe more?....I say she is screaming at times to keep from being excessive but after all she is being brutally tortured. And, will continue to be. Thanks again for the input and there will be lots more for her ,her companions and other stories of other unfortunates..
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the story was real good and realy hot but it is in MAJOR need of spelling checking, my rating is based on the story itself, if i based iton the story and spelling, it would be more of a 4 or 5 please do better on the spelling for your next post
I re-read the story and your comments and felt you deserved a higher rating as a result i hope you post more of this very soon (10/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 10, 2006)
- Thank you for the compliments..there will be many more stories with our unfortunate sweetheart....I really apoloigize for the spelling...I went back over it before sending but I missed more than a few..I'll try harder.....I hope you enjoy this kind of torture and violence...obviously I do.
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 12, 2006)
- Thanks again....I have posted more of the story and hope you continue to enjoy
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whiplash2003653
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- The story is a very good one. I rate it with 5.
As per what should it include, such as only torture or else , as far as I have been able to read all over the world (real cases) the interrogation of female detainees in despotic regimes and in secret places goes sexal almost before beginning it. But of ocurse, it is the author who decides what is it that he wants to write.
Only suggestion is make the charadter last long. No snuff. No gore. No need for that.
Hope to read Chapter 2 soon.
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This is an absolute ten! Cortez style... I hope that the unfortunate girl will learn the horrors of electricity, very sooon... Make it much torture and little or even no sex please. /Electrosadist (10/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 11, 2006)
- Thank you kindly for the roses....I wish I were worthy to carry the shoes of Cortez...He is my inspiration and try to be as vivid as he..As for our young lady.....stand by..the electrician cometh.....another chapter tonite...Chapter 3......Chapter 2 is in their hands and should appear soon....I like to keep the sex out too.....Im a extreme,violent torture person....Thx again..
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First part a little cruel, but the second very sexy. (8/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 11, 2006)
- Thanks for the kind words...they are appreciated....Sorry you didnt care for the cruelty part,,you may want to skip the rest of this story....it gets Much worse.....all my stories are nearly entirely of extreme,violent, torture.....Again thanks for the review..
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Mar 10, 2006 |
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cant wait for more (10/10)
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Von Schmiser
(Edit) (Mar 10, 2006)
- Tank you for the kind comments....There WILL be more....much much more....and will be more fun with our prisoner....hope you dont mind the screams....she screams more as we go on...
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You have a direct and fresh style. Very nice to read. It just seems are very short and character! Where is the character? (8/10)
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