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The principals Pet
Author: Kavenway
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(Added on Feb 1, 2006)
(This month 16896 readers) (Total 34478 readers) |
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The principal take a student home for discipline and sex. |
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Average (?):  (3.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
many
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Feb 8, 2006 |
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enjoyable (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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I agree with most of what Dododecapod wrote.
This is not the absolute worst I've seen on
this site -- but it IS close. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Feb 6, 2006 |
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Have to agree with the other reviews; lots of horrors here. One minute she is told to call her Miss (which is NOT an abbreviation, so no period is necessary), the next she is calling her Ma. She doesn't have to go to the bathroom between getting out of school at 3 and the next morning? Or right after the first spanking?
There could be a good story hiding there.. but it's hiding. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 6, 2006 |
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the spacing is poor, the story was just ok, nothing spectaular in it (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dododecapod
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Feb 4, 2006 |
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I did not finish this; I could not bear the hideous assault upon the English language one second more. Your punctuation is the worst I have ever seen in published work, and is without any form of merit; your descriptions are non-existent; your grammar is poor, at best.
It does not mater how good your ideas are if you are incapable of communicating them. I would suggest a return to the basic learning of English, at around a third-grade level. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Feb 3, 2006 |
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While this was your first story, There were some problems. As other reviewers have pointed them out, I will not go over them.
You can really make something of this story. I will watch for other chapters. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
bob_aganoush
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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Yes, the grammar gets in the way of what otherwise could be an interesting and erotic premise. Next time consider using a grammar checker or editor. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lady Lance
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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The story in itself was neither special nor inspired and likely would have warranted a 5 if it weren't for problems with both grammar and spelling.
I am not a grammar bitch, but anyone would have noticed the lack of quotation marks. There is absolutely no reason to *not* use them! I also noticed an over-dependence on spell check. I found at least one instance where "orgasm" was spelled "organism."
I would recommend that your next story be reviewed by a human beta reader, it'd help things out tremendously. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
jackslittleprincess
(Edit) (Feb 2, 2006)
- I have to say the same thing. I couldn't read past the first couple of sentences because the font was annoying and it really needed to be edited.
I realize that not everyone is a pulitzer-prize winner, but a little consideration for the reader, please.
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