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Perverted Indian Housewife
Author: Masala
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(Added on Jan 28, 2006)
(This month 19585 readers) (Total 47627 readers) |
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Western influence seems to be taking over the world. What happens when an over experienced nympho marries into a conservative family? Cuckold & Incest. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mainhoona
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Feb 21, 2006 |
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Excellent. I liked the fact that you mentioned the continuous eye contact. (8/10)
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sunburststrat
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Feb 6, 2006 |
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I agree there are some problems with the writing, but sometimes I give big marks based on imagination and heat, and this author has got plenty of both!
I love the dominant wife with the wicked tongue and evil mind. She's quite good at psychological torment. The author has set things up nicely for future entanglements with family.
I think this author just needs a good proof-reader to assist prior to submittal, and some encouragement from us readers to continue. The Indian to English language translation is essential to appeal to a wider audience. The 2nd chapter was more enjoyable as a result. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Jan 31, 2006 |
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The story in itself could be good. A few words in a foreign language do not disturb me, but here full conversations in one of the more than 80 Indian language.... Myself I m used to speak 5 European languages and understand partly some others... but my Indian knowlegde is nihil. Foreign people are really missing a lot when all the conversation is not understable.
Sorry but I cdan only give a 2 for this (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdanials
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Jan 30, 2006 |
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Masala, you have the beginnings of a good author. Please keep on writing. With practice and some feedback from an editor, you will do very well. (5/10)
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affinajoseph
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Jan 30, 2006 |
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Hi
I found this story pretty good. Its ok if indian slangs are used. There are lots of stories out here in which other languages are used. The author I hope will continue this story. This is a kind of story I was looking for. Being an Indian lady I appreciate author's work (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Jan 29, 2006 |
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Where to begin? If I read this story aloud, with an Indian accent, it makes pretty much sense, I guess. Unfortunately, much of the impact of the story is totally lost due to the conversation not being translated into English.
Morals are like word usages; they are different everywhere in the world. The Indian morals of who might be forward or immoral are certainly not the same as they are in the West.
The author is to be congratulated on the effort: your English is MUCH better than my Hindi. But your story suffers from many, many errors; incorrect word choices (perhaps by a spell checker), misplaced punctuation, missing "articles" (parts of speech: a, an, the, etc.) or incorrect ones. A western editor who also spoke Hindi might be able to assist. Until then, the story is unreadable, and brings no pleasure. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Masala
(Edit) (Jan 29, 2006)
- I'm sorry if u didnt like the story. I'm not a writer and hadn't considered the international readers before posting. Plus I couldn't get anyone to help me out so I posted as it is. I wrote it when I was feeling horny. I have read so many good stories here that I felt I'd contribute in some way.
Sorry Again.
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