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A Training Story
Author: daddiebear50
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(Added on Nov 23, 2005)
(This month 58958 readers) (Total 86415 readers) |
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Jane, a divorcee fantasies, lead her to a man, who trains women |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
suzy9
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Nov 30, 2005 |
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Definitely a good story. Good description of the sub's character and feelings. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
daddiebear50
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2005)
- Thank you suzy9. Not sure how to keep it fresh though. I'll try. Thanks for the encouragement.
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Nov 28, 2005 |
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The reviewers are consistent here. A very in depth training story which explores a bit more than the physical. You handle humiliation so well. I did detect a bit of pronoun confusion in places so Nikita might be right about a proofreader. A second pair of eyes often catch what you overlook. You might want to see if some sweet young lady want's to be trained to the task.Volunteers anyone?
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
daddiebear50
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2005)
- Thanks. But maybe some middle aged tough ole broad would be more appopriate. <g>
I'll have to check those pronouns better (or more likely, watch the loose fingers).
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nikita
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Nov 28, 2005 |
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What took you so long? I like the 'nasty' turns you took. Perhaps a proofreader next time, for a quick look see. I'm cruising for a bruising...(smile) (8/10)
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- Replied by:
daddiebear50
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2005)
- That is a long and very dull story. Glad you like the twists. I like the idea of sexual discovery. Embarrasment, discovery, desire. Not unlike the way most of us learn about our sexuality. Acckk! Phylosophy. Stop that.
As for your cruising. No. (but maybe I need the bruising for it). I try (checked 20 times) but I am what I am. Maybe I should find one, but I hate to waste peoples time for nothing.
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| Reviewer:
Sam'sJasmine
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Nov 28, 2005 |
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Very nice begining for what I hope is a long hot story. Very enjoyable. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
daddiebear50
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2005)
- Thank you. Yes it is intended to be, however, life, and my writing skills will slow its progress. Hopefully I can continue it soon. (lesson two is posted though)
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pejanon
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Nov 26, 2005 |
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This story proves, yet again, that even simple, seemingly banal material can be good story - if handled well.
Author's involvement with characters shows - and that makes the story tick.
Very Enjoyable. (However i was hoping the author will exercise artistic freedom and push first session further.)
I hope this turns out to be firsts of many training sessions and other interesting activities.
(And - I liked 'no dicrimination' approach)
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
daddiebear50
(Edit) (Dec 2, 2005)
- pejanon;
Thank you for the review. I'm glad you like it so far. Yes the intent is to take the training as far as possible over numerous chapters. I have several ideas for the future. Lesson two is sent. Hopefully, it will be posted soon, and hopefully, lesson three will soon be finished.
Discrimination approach? you mean men getting the same outrageous fees for services. Yes it would be nice, but was more a tee hee. (but real intent was for it and 'funds added' to be a dowery when the trainer found her a master. )
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