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Toilet Lady
Author: T Bone Steak
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(Added on Oct 28, 2005)
(This month 16900 readers) (Total 48376 readers) |
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A girl from the Ukraine wants to work in a rich country. She has to pay back the human trafficker. She discovers, it isn't easy. If you don't like a story with abortion or needles, don't read it! |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Dragon
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Nov 3, 2005 |
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The curious use of English lends character to the subject matter. There is considerable potential to follow up this starter with more degradations and I look forward to further instalments. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Guiller
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Nov 1, 2005 |
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Hard to read, but is ok at general (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 29, 2005 |
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the english is terrible (5/10)
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- Replied by:
T Bone Steak
(Edit) (Oct 29, 2005)
- Quote from mkemse: "the english is terrible".
But I do know when to write capital letters and how to use punctuation. Furthermore, when you say “the English is bad”, I assume it has to with my usage of English and not the language English in general?
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Oct 28, 2005 |
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Your writing has improved dramatically since the last time I reviewed one of your pieces. I must congratulate you on your improvement, a testiment to your wish to improve. And, unlike previous stories, which were difficult to follow, this one flowed much better. You've still room for improvement - your writing is still a bit choppy and, of course, your understanding of the use of English words (your second or third language)could be improved. Still, this is a good effort. Incidentally, I am a one language guy, so you are way ahead of me. (5/10)
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