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Lien the Fifth
Author: Mad Lews
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(Added on Oct 1, 2005)
(This month 24920 readers) (Total 65949 readers) |
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It's good to be King, especially if you're a twisted sadistic Tyrant. Well it's good for you anyway but a little rough on your subjects. Imagine Richard the third melding with the Marquee D'Sade and you've got the gist of this one. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Mothbrad
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May 16, 2007 |
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As always, Mad Lews comes through with the goods. I haven't read the last chapter, because I'm pretty sure I won't enjoy it, but having said that, if you don't mind a bit of humour with your cruelty, Lews is the man. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Sep 8, 2007)
- I wish to assure you that this tale, and most of my offerings, ends with a morally uplifting summation. Please feel free to read the ending and postscript without fear or trepidation.
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Beswitchingly Positive
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May 5, 2007 |
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Well, well, A fairy tale, I have to admit, there were parts of this one I skimmed, Mad Lews; gore and violence are not things I like.
Personal opinons aside, this is a well crafted offering, humorous at points and deeply disturbing. I saw the ending coming and loved that the evil king was accidently deposed. Have faith in Mad Lews to pull a madly sad ending out of such a happy potential ending. Nah, it couldn't have ended well, that would have spoiled everything.
Is there anything up here by Mad Lews that is not great writing? (10/10)
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isabeau
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Feb 15, 2006 |
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a very well written story with quite an intricate plot. even with the cruelty involved in the story i found myself mesmerized with the tale and those poor wives.. sort of like Henry the eighth lol.. and i have read other tales by this author and thoroughly enjoyed reading them. fantastic, MadMax, when will you be writing again? isabeau aka melanie who you know already (10/10)
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- Replied by:
isabeau
(Edit) (Feb 15, 2006)
- ooops i meant Mad Lewis sorry lol
- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Feb 15, 2006)
- Melanie,
My thanks for your most generous review. I admit I've been a bit remiss in my writing of late but should get back in the swing of things shortly
Mad (not max) Lews
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LordVetinari
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Feb 10, 2006 |
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My favourite effort, by far, from his Madness, Mad Lews. This story was well written, well imagined, and well executed. After all, you've gotta love a story that can use a word like "Clintonian". My only disappointment is the "happy" ending. Still, a good read. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Feb 11, 2006)
- My thanks for your most generous review M'lord.
I also regret the necessity for a "happy" ending but the requirements of the Fairy Tale Standards Bureau (FTSB) are firmly established. Without an uplifting moral values ending the social responsibility quotient of the story would have fallen below .7325 and libraries would no doubt have rejected the tale as far too scandalous for general release. I did add a bit of an epilogue in hopes of retaining your favor.
Your 'umble scribe
Lews the Mad
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Dec 27, 2005 |
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Not your best writing...more grammatical errors than normal. I do expect near perfection at this point. Just the same, the writing style was quite amusing and I found myself drawn on, carefully reading each line to ensure I missed none of the humor. I shall, of course, read on as this tale progresses. I will agree with Tiffany that there was no erotisism to this tale - but then, it is just the first chapter and one does not, after all, blow up the "death star" at the beginning of the movie.
Edit: Part two was more compelling than the first part. Though, truth be told, this is certainly not to my tastes as far as fiction goes. You may wish to suggest dramamine to those with less stable pallets should you take the torture much further.
**Edit: Well, I just pushed through the final portions of this tale. You managed (I knew you would) to improve upon your story in dramatic and comical fashion. This is as untypical as it gets. As such, I have pushed three bolts through my previous rating and erected a new rating in it's stead. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Oct 6, 2005)
- Which begs the question is all BDSM erotic, I for one think... well maybe, but not always in an obvious way. I've certainly written more than a few stories that were meant to be more entertaining than erotic, not that there's anything wrong with erotic mind you.
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Mad Lews
(Edit) (Dec 27, 2005)
- Well congratulations (I think) for your perseverance. Making it through act two and three earns you a spot in the "Iron stomach" drawing to be held later next year. As a reward of sorts I mellowed out a bit for the ending though I have gotten the usual complaints about "going soft prematurely" Glad you enjoyed it
Mad
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mkemse
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Dec 26, 2005 |
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was very enjoyable to read (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Dec 28, 2005)
- I'm glad you enjoyed it, this one was a struggle to balance.
- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Dec 29, 2005)
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Dododecapod
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Dec 6, 2005 |
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I found this a very nice beginning. Your blunt, clear prose is easy to read without being simplistic, and you've introduced the title character quite nicely (been reading up on your Caligula and your Shaka, I notice).
A couple of spelling errors marred things (therefor, and its MARQUIS de sade), and you haven't yet lived up to your hype paragraph, but I'm sure you will. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Oct 4, 2005)
- Well I could argue that Marquee refers to an awning or tent used by lady's of rank and Therefor is indeed a perfectly acceptable archaic spelling but the truth is my editor is indisposed and I'm trying to break in a new one. So you noticed A Shaka like bereavement, good catch! I've got the next chapter waiting for the editorial board to comb through so as to avoid any more unfortunate errors. The third is still percolating through the old cranium but Least Tiffany Love despair we will indeed keep it under 30 pages as long as you use a 12 pt or smaller font. What's that you say? She's dumped me, damn…
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Dododecapod
(Edit) (Oct 9, 2005)
- Hmm, did I say WILL live up to your Hype paragraph? It seems you have...
Poor Annabel. Though, given the King's proclivities, I'm surprised her daughter died a virgin...
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Dododecapod
(Edit) (Dec 6, 2005)
- Oh, poor Delia. This does not bode well for her successors...
You seem to have gotten your editing staff back. The quality of part 3 makes it quite easy for me to increase my initial rating for this story.
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Dapper Dan
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Nov 27, 2005 |
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Are those blokes mad? Sorry bad pun I know. This is the best dam satire I've read here in months. OK it's the only satire I've read here in a long time but I'd have given it a ten if I didn't think you'd grow fat and lazy on us Mad, keep up the good work. The Queens are dead, long live the King! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Nov 28, 2005)
- I can forgive bad puns, and yes parts may be a little satirical. You need not worry about fat or lazy, I can accomplish either with little encouragement from the gallery so feel free to up your score :-). I do feel an urge to kill off a king however…. Just need to find a cleaver queen with a twist. But thank ye kindly for the review.
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pejanon
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Nov 26, 2005 |
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This is a story a local madman might spin by the fire in musty old tavern for another local madman, over the mug of (well earned? ) stout. Oh it's witty, and will rise few chuckles (even an eyebrow) AND is and is so well written (we're talking Mad Lews here, what grammatical error or two) but can't we get some insights in particulars of fates of those luckless lasses and royal scepters. And even no real ending - busy checking the bottom of the mug?
C'mon Mad you got yourself a whole damn kingdom to play with and ... less than 9000 words? Unless, lo and behold (and a drumroll) Mad Lews is entertaining idea of multi-chapter story? If so I will just looove to change vote.
local fellow crazie (who read "Our Firt Fem Prez...", so there!)
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Oct 4, 2005)
- AH Pej, we really need to find a proper tavern in commuting distance. Yes we've got a bit more to the story on it's way, No I haven't gotten to the end yet. So keep that typing finger limber as you may need to change your score up or down. Uhm, you don't mind messy do you?
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pejanon
(Edit) (Nov 27, 2005)
- King Weirdright is finally begining to entertain readers in earnest.
Since I am sucker for perversions I was moved by this variant of Nobel marriages - even if intestinal garrote/roasting was way over my head (my problem).
And it is told with cool relish and easy handling of characteristic MadWit. (Like any woman who was about to be gutted skewered and slowly roasted to death Delia had a few concerns but the one she choose to address first was: "My hair! Lien, please don't let them burn my hair. I beg you darling, if you ever had feelings for me, save my hair please!" lol)
I refuse to rise to various allusions which Mad offers for readers' cerebral enjoyment - this is supposed to be fiction!
(I was about to complain that some detailed action/descriptions were in order - and Mad was kind enough (?) to deliver in ch 3.
Rating upped... to 8
Why not more? We must leave something for long winter months...
"If only his Mum could see him now."
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Oct 9, 2005 |
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I kind of hoped for more details about the toture and pains the Queen went through (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Nov 28, 2005)
- I kinda hope chapter three will fill in a few blanks but I'd thought the end of chapter 2 was a bit graphic...
- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Dec 27, 2005)
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rob.wilson
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Oct 3, 2005 |
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I liked a bit of the humor that was involved. To often I think people forget that it's OK to have some fun with BDSM.
The story could use a little bit more description and charaterization in the beginning.
I don't know if this was a prolog or your first chapter. Basically you have given away the entire plot to your story in the first few pages which I didn't care for. But that being said, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and wait for the additional chapters before making a "official" review.
I gave you a 5 because I think the idea shows promise. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Oct 4, 2005)
- I appreciate your beneficial doubt Rob and will try to make it worth your while. As for the plot being handed out in advance, not really, unless you've been hanging out in the forums. I suspect I can come up with a twist or two in any event.
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tiffany love
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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There was absolutely N O T H I N G erotic about this one. Just your average story (2/10)
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- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- Patients Love, plots develop as do characters. Though I note with passing interest you only seem to enjoy stories written by Brittany Heart. I'll have to read a few and see what tweaks your fancy.
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tiffany love
(Edit) (Oct 1, 2005)
- Sorry cowboy but a story must grip you from page one, unless you write a 200+ page book; which no one will read. like the logest story on this site: "Our First Female President by HarryBerg"
who has time to read 82 chapters ? A story should only be maximum 25-30 pages
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