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The Sadistic Ways of Ms. Langenkamp
Author: THE Traveller
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(Added on Sep 8, 2005)
(This month 83655 readers) (Total 131417 readers) |
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Jenny Stanton discovered that her fiancé wasn't faithful to her. Next, her car broke down in the middle of nowhere. She tought it couldn't get any worse than this. But poor Jenny didn't know that the worst was yet to come. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
joepro
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Sep 24, 2005 |
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I enjoyed reading your story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Sep 25, 2005)
- Joepro, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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| Reviewer:
brittany heart
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Sep 10, 2005 |
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Not 'hot' enough, I think it needs more description and less dialog. Tell us what each charachter is thinking. Put a little background so the reader can learn more about the charachters, this way they will be more turned on when they read the story (2/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2005)
- Brittany, you're right. I'll try to balance the descriptions and the dialogue. Actually I planned on giving more information on characters as I wrote chapter six, making these chapters kind of like an extended prologue.
Thank you for your critique.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 8, 2005 |
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just ok nothing spectaular as i was hopingthere would be based on the storyline (7/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2005)
- mkemse, I'll try to expand the story as I add more chapters.
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| Reviewer:
jamb
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Sep 8, 2005 |
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Very good. I love how Jen is utterly helpless and being forced to do things against her wishes by these two bitches. Long may this continue! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Sep 8, 2005)
- Jamb, I'm glad you liked the story. Thank you.
One of the things I wanted to emphasize was Jen's helplessness. So thanks for pointing that out.
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