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A Date with Judy
Author: rolf palsy
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(Added on Jul 30, 2005)
(This month 20576 readers) (Total 44853 readers) |
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A stainless steel chastity belt gets in the way of progress on my first date with Judy the teen tramp teaser. She gets what she deserves, and I get to tell a funny story about. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Marneus
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Apr 27, 2011 |
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i take pleasure to read it (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 7, 2010 |
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The mentioning of Judy being built like a brick shithouse had me envisioning a girl with the elegance of an elephant and the finesse of a foul-mouthed dockworker...
The story continues in the sort of language one would expect in one of Bukowski's smelly pubs, not from a kid who should still be a tad green behind the ears.
Rolf Palsy should also realise that there's over the top and over over the top.
"A Date With Judy" isn't either. It's so far over everything that it lands smack on its face in a puddle of mud at the foot of the Writer's Guild, in order to get a thorough make-over...
JJ (4/10)
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LordVetinari
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Aug 13, 2005 |
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Strange, but still intriguing. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Aug 1, 2005 |
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The idea of the tease who wore a chastity belt was a good start but you didn't really do anything with the idea. The scences and descriptions were way passed overkill. It just felt like you were trying to hard to get your point across. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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it was ok, a bit unreal;istic but a good story, but not great (5/10)
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Engineer
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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At least grammar and spelling are OK. Expression is just plain. Content is among the most dull scribbling I ever read.
(3/10)
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Rocky
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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An interesting little piece. Well-written and enjoyable. (8/10)
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