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Walking on the Wild Side
Author: Nikita
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(Added on Jul 27, 2005)
(This month 35727 readers) (Total 68100 readers) |
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When two beautiful roommates explore the wild side of life, they meet with unexpected consequences. The arrogant Cindy, a human Barbie doll, meets her match in Patrick. He makes Cindy debase herself in a place where she is the queen, turning her into a slut. Kymber gets swept away by Michael, an older man who sees her as a challenge to control. She turns into his sex slave and the training is brutal. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 26, 2009 |
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Good storytelling? Check.
Good story pace? Check.
Good drawing of characters? Check.
Good psychological profiles? Check.
Good inventive/painful situations? Check.
Good dialogues? Check.
No inconsistencies? Check.
No spelling errors? ...errr... okay, so i didn't check that.
Good handling of the subject material? Check.
Maximum score? Check.
JJ (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Nikita
(Edit) (Jan 26, 2009)
- Thank you!
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2009)
- You are more than welcome, Nikita. Added your story page to my bookmarks, so I'll be popping-up on those later-on, too...
JJ
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chksng19
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Dec 22, 2006 |
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A wonderful story as always from one of my favorite writers.
Here's hoping you can find time for more of the same! (10/10)
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fantazmaster
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Dec 16, 2006 |
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I am going to give this one the highest ranking possible as Nikita has ceratinly written a story
that very skillfully achieves a very realistic dialogue between the characters.Chapter 3 is especially exemplerary of this dialogue.here we have
a "cat that ate the canary" setting that is as hot as the Rosemary oil that appears in the consequences part of this chapter. (10/10)
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H Dean
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Dec 15, 2006 |
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This is a pretty damned good read. The flow is helped along by rather bright dialogue that comes off as believable. A couple of technical mistakes early on worried me - but they turned out to be anomalies that do not rate in my review.
That's the mundane part of the review. Unfortunately, anything I say further will merely be repetitious of the praise of other reviewers. With that in mind I will close my review by agreeing that this tale is - brutal, hot, exciting - a real groin yanker. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mistress M
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May 14, 2006 |
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Well written. Good narrative style and characters are well developed. So much so, that I'd like to read more. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2006)
- Thank you Mistress. I can only hope you will come back to read more chapters as I add them.
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pejanon
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Sep 3, 2005 |
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Stuff EVERYBODY wants to know: boiling hot! In the area of: dark smutglasses must be worn at all times (both IR and UV radiation), mind those sticky fingers afterwards. And not only hot it is even interesting. Wild Thing indeed! Solid 10
Stuff SOMEONE might want to know: It is impressive how the author(ess) manages to string series of jam-packed scenes and STILL have a story. Tiny bits of background info are strategically injected and don't interfere with the main thrust of the story (as they usually do). Thanks god for that!
Interesting characters, or even better: interesting COMBINATION of charters (male and female pair compliment each other). Oh they are types all right but have just the right amount of flavoring to move them out of stereotype field. (The bartender in ch 2 seems like an afetertought however. If you need a walking cock with a whip, fine, don't turn him into a shallow sidekick - OR make him a REAL character.)
Narrative style: Most of it is tight and crisp. But when the scenes get furious the writing follows and occasionally get out of control. There is sense that authoress is trying too hard to make it lively and impressive. (Please don't do that, you 're good enough without "fist sized speeding trains" and strained adjectives and comparations. First they were chestnuts, then lemons - what's next - coconuts, H bombs?)
And yes, the shifts in viewpoints (and from external to internal) are jarring (or as my esteemed co-reviewer put it: disjointed.). No need for that either. solid 8
Matter of taste only: I found ch 1 more carefully crafted and actually juicier than ch 2.
overall 9 - More More!
Oh and I loved the soundtrack! (more of that too)
And the callgirls go - ooops
And the Catholic scoolgirls go: ti titi ti-ttiti ... enter sax, exit Pej.
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2005)
- Pej:
As a soccer mom who likes to read and write dirty stories, I blush at your review. You are too generous.
Short stories limit how much info to give about each character through acts and conversation. Therein lies the dilemma.
Jimmy, the bartender is someone I want to explore more, but, hesitate to do him injustice. He did sound like a walking dick with a pair of legs with lemon sized balls. After all, he is a body builder and they have excercises for balls, don't they? Jimmy was also nice enough to wipe the cum out of Cindy's nostrils with a washcloth. Wouldn't that indicate some concern for her? (heh, heh) He will be a returning character and not without his gun.
Yes, you are on point about the sex scenes. I should have used restraint. This is no excuse, but it was hard to write these scenes without getting all hot and bothered. The keyboard was getting a little sticky with all the racing thoughts, you know.
With deep appreciation for the time you took to write the review, they will not go unnoticed. Your suggestions will help me to aim higher and kick it up a notch...
Naughty Nik
soundtrack in the background: Feel Good Time by Pink
- Replied by:
pejanon
(Edit) (Sep 6, 2005)
- Hi Nik,
Everyone deserves decent revievew once in a while. Especially naughty, blushing soccer moms (wow)
Ok so now we are finished with serious part, how about something really serious - write ch 3.
Hell, use a sheet of plastic over the keyboard <he he> and relax - oh but you can't is that it? lol (well you can always take care of the ahem bussines beforehand that write it so that WE get to take care of afore mentioned bussines etc.
Late night soundrack : Glorybox, Portishead
Pej
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| Reviewer:
Breathless
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Aug 28, 2005 |
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Smoking hot story Nikita! I love the brutality and humiliation Cindy is enduring, and look forward to seeing more of Kym as well. Nice use of the geeks - who should consider themselves lucky to be in the right place at the right time.
As indicated by Sal in his review, this story makes me eager to read the next installment - can't think of a better compliment than that! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Aug 28, 2005)
- Thank you Breathless...feedback like this cumming from a sub is very flattering. Please PM me if you have any ideas you want to share...perhaps some inspiration? ; )
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Aug 27, 2005 |
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You've created a very hot story. Sometimes it's easy to follow and flowing well; at other times it becomes a disjointed stream of conscious but I barely lost a beat. For a rude crude hot story and a little comeuppance that the reader can cheer for this story has it (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Jul 27, 2005)
- Many thanks for your review, you are a peach. This is my first story. I am glad you enjoyed it.
- Replied by:
Mad Lews
(Edit) (Aug 27, 2005)
- Well after reading the next chapter I had to relent and give you a nine. I mean everyones doing it and I wouldn't want to be mistaken for a thrifty geek type now would I?
- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Aug 28, 2005)
- Dear "Thrifty": I think 60 strokes would be well deserved. But you may want to check for dangling participles...heh,heh
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| Reviewer:
salpecam
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Aug 27, 2005 |
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Part 1:
An excellent story. Lots of potential for character development - The return of the geeks, or maybe a "super-geek" from among their number. Patrick's directives could fill many chapters. Michael's lengthy training could too. Also, the two female protagonists have lots of room for character development too, including the possibility of Cindy's prequels (she can't have brushed off ALL the men who chatted her up, could she... ?).
I get a certain twinge of disapproval of Cindy from Kym's character. Telling her off for smoking is quite overt (I 'll admit I don't like it myself) but there seems to be a current of less obvious disapproval going on too. I can't help but wonder if this might expand to become a plot feature in the future.
I'm guessing the barman might figure in future chapters to an increasing degree. Is that right Nikita? I think we should be told.
I'm happy to point out that the story as a whole makes me very eager to read the next instalment. If I was buying a book in a shop, an author might take this as the greatest compliment their audience could bestow. I hope Nikita can feel similarly complimented.
All in all, a very pleasant and erotic tale which has spurred me on to get mine published soon. I'm glued to the keyboard!
Part 2: Controlling the girl
Superb work, just my thing. Whipping, brutal anal fucking, tailhook butt plug, painful nipple clamps, hair pulling,Seamed stockings, wtraining, rope bondage... It could have been written just for me.
I LOVED the innovation about earplugs - so she can't hear voices. I use earplugs often for ear defence at work, when fixing generators etc. But I never thought of using them in this fascinating new way. I'm now going to have to wander around my workshop looking for new uses for tools. Must not think about nipples too often as I peruse the long-nose pliers...
I'm pleased to see Cindy's character development going exactly the way I had hoped, and her being subjected to the kind of rough treatment I like to read about. Despite what Mad Lews asserts, the stream-of-consciousness gives the story pace and involves the reader more. It suits this plot.
I'm stirred once again to get more of my stories completed.
Cheers again on a great new chapter. I just wish I could have "been there". (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Aug 19, 2005)
- Thanks Sal, that was a lovely review. (blushing). Most of the very good points you made about the character's development have been addressed in the next installment. I will let you know when it is posted. Looking forward to your tail, err, tale...
- Replied by:
agp_millie
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2005)
- Sal,
You say just how i felt, but with considerably more eloquence.
So Nikita my wonderful. Looks like you've a strong, budding Fan club.
*Hugs* millie.
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balorlv
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Aug 12, 2005 |
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A tad early to review this story with only one chapter posted so far but I promised to read the authors story. It is well written and shows promise. A little light for my liking but that is not a reflextion on the authors creativity or capabilities. I look forward to reading the completed story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Aug 9, 2005 |
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Excellent story, love the sex chain story of the girls rape. Hope Michael has more training for her in the future. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Aug 9, 2005)
- Thanks, (blushing smile)...
Nik
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| Reviewer:
Sui Lerua
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Aug 5, 2005 |
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Classy and sassy! A very promising first story, Nikita. You have talent. I'm looking forward to seeing something more substantial from you in the future.
(9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Aug 5, 2005)
- Many thanks for the rating and for reviewing it.
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| Reviewer:
RhondaLee
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Jul 29, 2005 |
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Quite creative. I like the story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2005)
- Thank you for your comment. I just wanted to know that you liked the story because it was a lot of fun writing it. Cindy's chapter is in the works. She is my favorite character and I have taken more liberties with her experiences. What am I talking about? Cindy has no bounds! She needs to be bound. It's more fun that way. To this end, I'm having a lot of dark fun investigating ...um...er...stuff for this story. Ooo, aaah, ouch...sorry...distracted...later...
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| Reviewer:
agp_millie
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Jul 29, 2005 |
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Lovely, pussy wetting story,
Thankyou nikita (9/10)
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- Replied by:
agp_millie
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2005)
- I want to add, that reading it again, i want to give it a 10/10 but the system is too awkward for me to do that. ... "Yummy" is the best single word to describe Walk on the Wild Side. ... *Hugs* millie mooe.
- Replied by:
nikita
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2005)
- Thanks Millie, Hugs and loving nipple twists from me to you. Glad you wanted to read it a second time...
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