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The Substitute
Author: Dom Master
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(Added on Jul 17, 2005)
(This month 50953 readers) (Total 92458 readers) |
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The tables of power turn when a ninth grade substitute teacher finds herself the victim of a massive gang rape, culminating in a severe spanking. Teenagers can be so cruel! |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 14, 2007 |
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i enjoyed the story butthe last part was a repeat of the first part (9/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Dec 14, 2005)
- Thanks for the review. I sent in the Prolog after the story had already been posted, and the web admin is having trouble getting it to come up first.
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| Reviewer:
nikita
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Nov 28, 2005 |
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I recommend readers choose the Prologue, it is a great reworking of the story. The beginning paragraph hooked the reader and set the stage for the rest of the suitably nasty ride. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Dec 14, 2005)
- Nikita - You were right that the story needed to grab the reader right away. I know I get bored wading through a lot of build up. Thanks for the kind review.
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| Reviewer:
chooky_104
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Nov 28, 2005 |
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Dont want to get into the middle of this 'ego fest' but I liked it...
Whoever 'Lex' is he needs to lighten up... (8/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Dec 14, 2005)
- You're right chooky, I let my ego go off on ol' Lex. That energy could have been better spent on a new chapter, or a good tit lashing on some well deserving slave...
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Jul 18, 2005 |
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Sorry you became the victim of Lex, like many others of us. Keep writing; I enjoyed your story. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2005)
- Since you decided to try to pile on, I have to defend myself, so let's look at the record. If memory serves me correctly, I gave a story of yours entitled "Kit" a very poor review, which to this day is still justified. You whined about it, but despite suggestions from me in a private communication to you concerning how you might escape from the corner you had painted yourself into, you never delivered the promised continuation of this story. Who is to blame for that? Did my poor review stunt your ability to write, not likely!
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kemosabe
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2005)
- Sorry if I seem to pile on, Lex; I was simply stating a fact.
Who's being sensitive now?
- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Jul 20, 2005)
- kemosabe - you certainly don't owe lex an apology. Lex - I wouldn't take such offense at your remarks had you not tried to suppress other reviewers' opinions that differed from your own. Your review offers nothing in the way of helpful critisism. If it was a story line you were bored with, why read it?
This excerpt is from the Reviewers Do's and Dont's
...do the author and us a service by not reviewing his or her work unless you can provide a dispassionate review that concentrates on style, writing skill, novelty, etc ...
- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Jul 21, 2005)
- kemosabe - thanks for reading the story.
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| Reviewer:
Breannefun
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Jul 18, 2005 |
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I'm sorry, but this story didn't deserve a six. Yes, the plot was a well tried one, but take a look at Hollywood! They're still using Shakespeare plots! Its the artistry that matters. First of all the scene was properly set, and I felt that I was really there. Then there was the creativity used in the tortures. I thought that was well done. This was NOT a bad story in any sense of the word. And lastly, I came twice while reading it...so that says something :D (9/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Jul 18, 2005)
- Thank you, Breannefun. Lex is a jaded, pompous ass on a futile search to regain the original thrill he must have derived from erotic stories, like a crack head trying to recapture that initial high. 5 artists will paint the same sunset 5 different ways; each applying their own interpretation, style and skill. A helpful critique would focus on the effort, not the fact that the observer has seen too many sunsets! Again, thank you for your review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jul 17, 2005 |
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Brutal, nasty, over the top, unbelievable, cookie cutter characters, ultra violent; all the ingredients for a mindless stew that was strangely refreshing considering there wasn't a shred of originality or novelty in this ode to nonstop mental illness manifested as writing. Those of us into such excesses will be richly rewarded; those with more delicate sensibilities should avoid at all cost. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
DomMaster
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2005)
- Lex - your reviews are just so much trite psychobabble intended to inflate your already oversized ego. I believe you are a bitter, under accomplished individual and think much too highly of yourself and of your opinions, akin to Larry Merchant (of HBO Boxing fame). I'm not sure if you were trying to say you liked the story or not, but frankly I don't really care. I know you privately chastised Bambi for giving me a favorable review for an earlier story you didn't like, so I guess I should appreciate the generosity of a 6. Thank you, thank you so very much.
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DomMaster
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2005)
- On second thought, maybe I misjudged you. I took the time to peruse your other reviews, and found the majority to be condescending and mean spirited; the words of a truly critical person. I have to admit that the fact that you have actually read and reviewed over 300 stories of this nature would make you something of en expert in this field – an alarming discovery. I actually spend the majority of my life in a real world that does not involve violent sexual fantasies, but you, my friend, are totally fucked.
- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2005)
- My review was fair, called it as I saw it, and certainly was not meant to arouse your delicate sensibilities, such as they may be. Your diatribe reminds me of some little child overreacting to some imagined slight. As for your statement that the majority of my reviews are nasty, you are a liar. A liar is one who does not speak the truth in case you don't understand what I said. On the other hand what should I expect from some buffoon who goes by the name of Dom Master and then tells me that he lives in the real world.
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