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Probation Violation
Author: Doc Sexaday
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(Added on Jun 18, 2005)
(This month 89670 readers) (Total 135367 readers) |
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This is a short story about a very unforunate girl. It is a complete fantasy. Young sexy girl meets a dominating lesbian... fun, fun! It's my first attempt at writing erotic fiction. I hope you all enjoy the tale as much as I enjoyed writing it. I'd like to thank several writers on this site. I'm sure you'll see their influence... Enjoy!!! (By the way... I've got more stories about little Kimmy depending on your response. Let me know if you want more.) |
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DaveDet78
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Mar 28, 2012 |
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It's got lesbians in it, so how can you not like it. This is the first story I read from this guy and I was pretty damn impressed. The anticipation and the way the story went along was impressive. One of the best writers in the genre right now (10/10)
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aliciaasu
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Now a bit of girl on girl action is great, but putting the prison element into it puts it over the top. My girlfriend loves Aubree s her favorite, but I'm going with this one. Doc really writes the terror and domination into this one. Read it with someone you're with for the night. (10/10)
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missymd78
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Mar 18, 2012 |
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Now, I've had a similar fantasy to what Doc writes here, so this story is very special for me. I could feel the aggression in the story. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Overall a very nice effort. I liked the short but accurate setting of Margaret's character but also that she stays within the set limits of that characterization, which makes her the more real.
Even though she's a nasty piece of woman, Margaret doesn't come across as unlikable. But that's due to the fact that her meanstreak makes us concentrate on 'poor' Kim Johnson, so the nastier Margaret gets, the better...
Good story, of which I hope it will still be continued, like it says at the end of chapter 6...
JJ (9/10)
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BigCat
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Aug 3, 2005 |
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Very Good start then startd to fade. (8/10)
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tina.matthews
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Jul 12, 2005 |
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Very well written. Couldnt help but read all of it at one go. Looking forward to the next chapter! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Jul 13, 2005)
- I take it from your review, you read all five chapters in one sitting. I'm happy you liked the tale. More coming soon... I've been getting alot of ideas from other readers (along with a bunch of my own, of course!). -Doc
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nikki`di
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Jul 5, 2005 |
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I have really enjoyed your story so far... reminds me of some of my stories. Hope you write more soon. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Jul 13, 2005)
- Glad you've enjoyed the story. Thanks for your response!- Doc
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hagibor hagadol
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Jun 21, 2005 |
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I think if you can get more descriptive with the actual sex play I would give it a 10. My only negative response to your story is that you seem to have rushed through the sex scene with Sam. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Jul 13, 2005)
- You may be right. I tend to focus more on Kim's humiliation than the actual sex. Thanks for your advice!- Doc.
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mike uk reader
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Jun 19, 2005 |
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A very good start to this story let's have much more soon.
As I have stated before I only review here when I consider a story meritorious yours is one of those and my type of full on erotica-well done- (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Jun 19, 2005)
- Mike,
Thanks for your review. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. You guys in the UK invented the spanking and humiliation format. We here in the US are indebted to you. I'm currently working on Part Two. I'm hoping it's even better than Part One. Little Kimmy isn't a submissive girl by nature. This is all very uncomfortable for her. However, she doesn't realize just how low she can sink. Stay tuned...
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The_Watcher
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Jun 18, 2005 |
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Certainly a promising start. It will be interesting to see what happens. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Jun 19, 2005)
- Stay tuned, Watcher. Part Two is under production. Little Kimmy is squirming as you read this...
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