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Linda and Miss Helen
Author: Nicole Victor
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(Added on May 7, 2005)
(This month 31030 readers) (Total 71741 readers) |
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A young woman tired of submitting to an online Mistress decides to make the move to real life submission. This is the story of their developing relationship. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Dododecapod
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May 21, 2005 |
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This looks like it could be quite good, but at this point I'll never know. Massive blocks of text without pause make my eyes water; I can't read this. Paragraphs exist to break up the action into digestible chunks. If you were to go through and do so here, I'll re-review it.
I just read part two. This is indeed a worthwhile piece, I enjoyed it immensely. You might be a little more imaginative with the punishments, and I'd like to see a little more detailed descriptions, but it's quality stuff. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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May 17, 2005 |
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First things first. Paragraphs don't cost extra. Use them freely. Please.
The action varied widely. Some parts were creative, interesting public humiliation scenes, a particular favorite of mine. However, a large part was mindless beating and ripping apart the sphincter and ass to the point that a trip to the emergency room would be imminent in real life.
The settings were sometimes hokey - a mall with a fetish shop that few know about? A trucker who happened to have 2 sex slaves on hand? (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
ella
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May 10, 2005 |
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I really enjoyed it. The lack of paragraphs didn't really bother me after a while. The contents however made up for everything else, and that's what counts, i believe.
I will be looking forward to the next part. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 8, 2005 |
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paragraphs? there were none!!! I gave up after the fist section (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
BDSM_Tourguide
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May 8, 2005 |
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I really enjoyed the content of the story. Lots of humiliation is always a good thing, in my opinion. However, I felt that using paragraphs instead of one long, continuous section would have made the story easier to read. Great work, though. Please keep it up. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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May 7, 2005 |
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good start, i will adjust the review rating as you continue to add to the post (7/10)
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