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Dom's Journal (Excerpt)
Author: Sir Dante
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(Added on Apr 19, 2005)
(This month 13720 readers) (Total 22164 readers) |
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After meeting and talking several times, Sir Dante introduces Kim to the submissive desires she's been curious about. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (7/10) |
Average
Rating: (7.5/10) |
Highest
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Reviewer:
Ruby
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Apr 27, 2005 |
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As the dom tells his story and makes his sub squirm, I wanted to feel what he was feeling; to revel in the power of being a male dom. Alas, it was a bit too much of the telling rather than the feeling. I enjoyed how he made her wiggle, squirm and cum. (7/10)
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Reviewer:
donikka
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Apr 23, 2005 |
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Very nice to have the sense of both torment and reality in a story - nice use of safe word "mercy" and checking in frequently with Your sub -- found it actually an enhancement instead of the distraction i thought it could be, being somewhat new to real-time BDSM, myself -- AND, though i skipped right ahead to Part II, i got a very nice orgasm *hehe* - Thank You, Sir Dante!! ~donikka (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Sir_Dante_2u
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2005)
- donikka, Thank you for your comments, I'm pleased that you enjoyed the story and the aspect of realism that I put in it. Nice to hear how you especially enjoyed Part II.
-Sir Dante
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Reviewer:
Lady Lance
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Apr 22, 2005 |
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The story was technically well written, making it a breeze to read, but somehow things just felt a bit...clinical. We know that you did and x and she felt y, but I just couldn't really get into it. Still, this is better than a lot of the stories posted on the site and if there is more, I'd probably check it out. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Sir_Dante_2u
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2005)
- Lady Lance, thank you for your constructive comments - they are appreciated. I admit this is my first attempt at writing, and there is a lot that I have yet to learn about getting the extra depth and feeling into a story. I will keep that in mind for future writing.
-Sir Dante.
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 20, 2005 |
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I thing the posting of the whole story would be nice (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Sir_Dante_2u
(Edit) (Apr 23, 2005)
- Hi La Toya, I agree - there were some problems with the story on the first few days. I notified the site and they've got things fixed. Thanks for your comments.
-Sir Dante
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