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Office Games
Author: littlebro_969
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(Added on Feb 14, 2005)
(This month 85204 readers) (Total 162033 readers) |
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Connie falls under the control of her boss (teresa). Teresa takes her farther and farther into submission. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Jun 10, 2005 |
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Our comments are similar to the author's other stories. The plot was quite good, but the details are lacking. You get a very brief idea on the motives of the characters, but it isn't really explored. Still, the plot was good enough to keep the reader until the end. (6/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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The plot was an excellent plot. Grammer could be improved and the teaser to the next chpater could have been a bit more of a tease. However, I enjoyed the story and look forward to future chaptersw hopefully. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Feb 17, 2005 |
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I would have rated the story high, but the chapters are so short and could use more detail. The idea of the story is good, it just needs more details. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Breannefun
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Feb 16, 2005 |
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Sorry I couldn't give it a higher rate, but to be honest, the writing skill of the writer needs practice. The plot and story line was interesting and kept me going all the way through the end, even though I do feel it was too short. 9k just doesn't cut it for a story like this. Ok, first of all the author changed tenses at least twice. Tack onto the fact that there were absolutely no descriptions whatsoever and it read like "this happened, then this happened, then this happened, then this." If this was a first attempt, kudos and keep trying. (5/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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good story so far, but please make the chapters longer, this has been an issue for me with all your stories (8/10)
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