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The Femina Empire
Author: Pluto
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(Added on Feb 1, 2005)
(This month 153646 readers) (Total 233279 readers) |
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Planet Earth is force to join the Femina Empire. A Federation of many planets. In this Empire, humans right are not distributed evenly, that is women have them all and the males have none, they are slaves. They are chattels, pieces of property, own by women. Humans from earth learn to adjust to this new reality. |
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Aug 25, 2011 |
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It would seem my original rating and comments have gone AWOL. So for the second time here are my comments:-
This is surely the most terribly written story on this site. It is clear that English is not the authors first language (perhaps not even the second). So why did the author not "publish" this story in their native tongue? If it was important to post it in English why was it not edited by a fluent English speaker? (1/10)
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JimmyJump
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Oct 12, 2010 |
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lthough Dryhill should watch his own grammar before pointing an accusing finger, I have to agree with him. Fully. Except that microwaves *do* bounce around in the ionosphere, causing disturbances in the latter. Solar powerstations (like used on the ISS) convert solar radiation into microwaves. At a certain time (mid-eighties) the USSR and the USA thought of directing such beams at Earth, but the microwave radiation causes severe heating of the ionospheric plasma... Okay, so far for my MIT moment.
Story is laughable.
JJ
Replied by Dryhill (Sep 23, 2010)
Dear JimmyJump,
Thanks for the info on microwaves. I understood them to be only usable on line of sight, because that is the way they were used in the 1980's for telecommunications purposes. But will the heating of the ionospheric plasma not cause the microwave beam to broaden/scatter to be next to useless?.
Regards,
Jim
Replied by JimmyJump (Sep 26, 2010)
Just like L.A.S.E.R. can be diverted through the use of mirrors and/or magnets, other microwaves can be diverted by other means. But you are right that most microwaves (like R.A.D.A.R., TV- and radio signals) are used in a "lign-of-sight" set-up for the plain and simple reason that radio-/microwaves travel in a straight line.
JJ (3/10)
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TuftyTrue
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Apr 30, 2010 |
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I really enjoyed this, but it needs to actually go somewhere. Can we have a non background chapter please? The last one was really heading in the right direction, but then just ends!!!
More please! (9/10)
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loki325
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Nov 2, 2008 |
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I thought it was good. I found trouble that 10 year old would get off on being a mistress. I look forward to more by this author. (8/10)
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BeautifulMystery
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Dec 27, 2007 |
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Had to register to respond.
Not my cup of tea honestly. I think the women in general were far too easily accepting of the new social condition, and we didn't really meet any women that objected, or men that put up any real fight.
Plus there are a lot of things being skipped over if the world is suddenly perfect, like companionship from a male, or any real understanding or compassion. I'd have to imagine the world would seem lonely the way it became.
For instance! What happens to a couple that is truly equal and passionately in love when the power changes?
Meh, maybe I'm a romantic :3 (4/10)
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shoeps
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Nov 20, 2007 |
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Well it`s fiction!!And to my opinion a very good one ,as rough as it should be! Please more of the cruel mistresses and (working-)slaves under their whips!Thank you in advance!
Christian (8/10)
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madmax2011
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Mar 6, 2007 |
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Barely readable (3/10)
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azrlg17
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Jan 18, 2007 |
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It gets very repetitive with technology after technology used to make any male rebellion impossible. This gets boring after a while. And impossible. I mean not impossible like Star Wars but impossible like sound waves that only cause pain to males.
And have the women been brainwashed? What would the average women do if her son/brother/father/husband were enslaved?
Julia not only has no problem with her son being enslaved and tortured, noo she amputates the arms of some of her former lovers (who she liked). Sorry I think it's just ridiculous.
And what place do submissive women (10%-15% of all women) have in this universe?
(5/10)
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slave2woman
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Sep 3, 2006 |
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liked it a lot, would love to be a slave in this world as i am a firm believer of total Female Supremacy, please send more of these stories (8/10)
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jip
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Feb 1, 2006 |
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nice story. perhaps a little exagerated, although some males did in the past or even today treath women badly. So the value of the story is that it could open the minds of some men. (7/10)
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grimdwa
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Aug 17, 2005 |
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great story, gives insight as to one of the many posibilities for a female dominated society.
would like to see it finished
(10/10)
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nyko
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Mar 30, 2005 |
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many grammatical and spelling errors but the story made up for the errors, i would like to see a sequal, maybe what happens to Lily, and the males around Her, does She have male cousins, uncles, how does Her slave training classes go, what do the male slaves learn, will there be interaction with Lily's female friends? a finely crafted story please post a sequal, well done Pluto be You male or female (9/10)
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SafetyPin
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Mar 13, 2005 |
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This story is well written and has good potential. However it needs more sexual interaction and detailed descriptions (less dialog). (7/10)
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gapgirl
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Mar 11, 2005 |
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This story did not grab me. Apart from the unlikely scenario, I feel that the writer is trying to put over a personal agenda for her own satisfaction rather than telling an interesting story. It seems a piece of hurried writing and has many gramatical and syntactical errors which need to be corrected.
An easy way to get a story plot that is interesting is to put one (or more) of the characters in a difficult situation and then say how they got out of it. In this way there is a tension created that the reader is anxious to see resolved. This story is a fait accompli from beginning to end. It's just a catalogue of closing all the loopholes so the men cannot escape. There is also far too much repetition of small detail which kills the pace of the story. Each chapter did not advance the story; it just set the same repeated details in a different scene. In short I found the story heavy going and unfulfilling. It just relates a hopeless situation. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Queen_Taylor
(Edit) (Jan 3, 2007)
- I have to disagree.
Many stories here are "unlikely." It's all fiction. To hold that against this story is essentially the same as holding a lack of realism against Star Wars.
As for the author pushing his/her own agenda, I don't see the problem with it. He/she is either a dominant female or submissive male. Either way he/she is writing about a subject that interests them. It's no different then when a dominant man writes about enslaving a helpless young girl.
Besides, I believe very strongly in female superiority, and I happen to think a society like this would make the world a better place. It's both my kink and philosophy :)
I'm glad Pluto wrote this story, so I don't have to write a similar one :P
I do agree that the many of the devices used to control the males went to far. I would have kept it to a simple collar and a bar code on the ass. The mind control was a little to much.
Again I agree that the minute details could have been toned down.
Still, at the end of the day, the content more then made up for this story's small flaws.
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| Reviewer:
duchifat
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Mar 9, 2005 |
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ן ךםהק טםור דאםרטץלקקפ םמתפךקשדק (10/10)
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egwmilaw
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Mar 9, 2005 |
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OK, for me that story is an interesting one...woth many nice scenes.. Generally...I don't like that kind of stories..(Scifi) but this one was an exception. On my opinion...you have to write more things about the ways that Mistress Julie used males for fun and for pleasure.. great try!! (9/10)
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pet10
(Edit) (Mar 10, 2005)
- You're right it is a good scifi: Mistress Julie's males make for her great pleasure but it would be maybe more voluptuous whithout mind-reading. So she has an easy job....
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pet10
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Mar 9, 2005 |
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Femina Empire prospective in the universe - what an idea!
But... in my opinion that is too much: when the freedom of thooght stops the men-slaves are animals: lose in value... (7/10)
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the prussian
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Mar 7, 2005 |
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I think that the concept is fantastic! The storyline captures the readers imagination and does not wander. It more than makes up for the grammer. I certainly hope that it is not finished. I would to see what Mistress Julie does on another world or how Mistress Lily handles the males in her absence. (As well as jason's new life) Very well done. (9/10)
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abitbent
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Feb 3, 2005 |
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The concept and fantasy is pretty amazing, however i suspect English isn't the authors first language. If you can look past the odd wrong word being placed here and there, you'll quite enjoy this story. (7/10)
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makito
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Feb 2, 2005 |
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I am anxiously awaiting the next installment. This is an extremely exciting story. Minor spelling and grammatical errors are slightly distracting but overall this is well worth reading. Kudos to the author!
(10/10)
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