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Lesbian Pussy
Author: Kelly M.
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(Added on Jan 15, 2005)
(This month 107606 readers) (Total 173513 readers) |
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A straight girl named Kelly is forced to be her friend victoria's lesbian sex slave. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jun 18, 2010 |
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A tenner, but a bit of a letdown, as this is exactly the same story as the later posted "Kelly & Connie", except for the namechange (Connie/Victoria) and some minor differences in wordchoice...
JJ (10/10)
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Dryhill
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May 27, 2010 |
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A good story, if a little over the top and unrealistic for my liking. (8/10)
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Clara H
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Aug 22, 2007 |
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10/10 enough said, keep up the great work (10/10)
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mkemse
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May 22, 2005 |
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very well written hope you add more maybe with some blackmail or enemas (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
sub_for_you
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May 22, 2005 |
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Kelly,
ohmygawd!!!! You're making me crazy with this kind of talk.
"Do you smell my pussy all over your face, slut?" Victoria demanded.
I want her pussy all over my face!!!
I rate this a 10 for hot!!!
Write more stories like this! (10/10)
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sunburststrat
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Mar 21, 2005 |
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I took a 2nd pass at this one because I saw it recommended by someone and I hadn't remembered the title. At any rate, I said it was a little over the top the 1st time I read it ... must have been my mood. It certainly did it for me this time. Everything worked. Very hot. The author handles the humiliation stuff nicely. So, I bumped the rating up a bit. I love when the subject of the humiliation gets to the point where her body starts to betray her. In the end, everyone's happy and no one even had to get beaten to a pulp for someone else's pleasure. Very nice!
I would like to see more from this author!
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Good, lots of heat. I like the verbal humiliation stuff, the forced submission, etc, although some of it is a little over the top for me. The general pacing of the story is good. When a girl just has to cum ... well for me ... that can lead to some great erotica! (10/10)
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Engineer
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Feb 7, 2005 |
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Because I had to opportunity to enjoy the edited version, I can freely express my pleasure. The story ist excellent in idea as well as in implementation. The rare case I like a story with unrealistic plot and many obscene talking - here it fits into place. Extra plus: The author finished the story in time. Just some exaggerations and stereotypes stop me from giving a 10. (9/10)
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ms2bused
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Feb 4, 2005 |
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This is an absolute gem! Maybe because I too dream and daydream of being totally subjugated and harshly, and humiliatingly used by another woman that I found solace in her story! I can only hope this story continues on and on!
A new fan,
neenee
(JaneenMarie O'Brien) (10/10)
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kristina katyn
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Jan 25, 2005 |
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This is a clever and erotic story that certainly made me squirm in my chair. We, her readers, should encourage Kelly to sit down and write more stories from her imagination. The more straight girls who find themselves unavoidably drawn to lesbian girls the better. (9/10)
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chksng19
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Jan 25, 2005 |
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Sigh. Kelly M., the most common concern in new writers first efforts is to not review their own work. Read the story as though it wasn't yours. Look to see if it's the right word. Be nasty to your story, as I can guarantee your readers will be. Do your sentences *start* with a period? Not usually; a full stop is at the end, yet yours look like this: "My story needs a proofreader .I need to find one .Soon"
As good as your story ideas may be, and there are some good ones in there, you'll lose well over half your readers if they can't figure out what you're saying due to spelling, punctuation, and grammar.
Get a friend who likes you well enough to be willing to point out your mistakes.
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After it was proofed, the story is really quite good. Most of the things which would distract a reader have been edited, and done well, too. I commend you on your effort here! (8/10)
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jbowler65
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Jan 22, 2005 |
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We won't add to the proofreading concerns which lowered the score to a 7. However, the content of the story was quite good and we do look forward to reading future chapters. (7/10)
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Rocky
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Jan 20, 2005 |
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Okay, admittedly, I didn't read the entire story. The spelling turned me off almost immediately. The use of a spell checker is obvious, but the words used were wrong. It's a "necklace" one wears around the neck, not a "neckless." Likewise, "drowning" is a bad thing that happens to non-swimmers in water, it's not a manner of speech. Try proofreading, or have someone help you with it, and perhaps I'll give it another shot. (5/10)
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Nitrofox
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Jan 19, 2005 |
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The plot is alright, but the spelling needs a major overhaul. A proofreader or two, or just reading it over yourself, would catch errors like "whole" instead of "hole". If english is not your native language, then please find someone for whom it is, as it will improve your story tremendously. (5/10)
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Master_chris
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Jan 16, 2005 |
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great stroy, can'twait for the next chapter (8/10)
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Jlangeville
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Jan 15, 2005 |
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Keep writing more and elaborating the scenes, enjoyed it. (9/10)
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Parker
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Jan 15, 2005 |
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Nice work, particularly for a first story. I enjoyed the humiliation and forced verbal submission. IMO, the story doesn't need a sequel. It's complete as is. (8/10)
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