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The Body Donor - The Subject
Author: Thomas Chaser
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(Added on Jan 8, 2005)
(This month 52284 readers) (Total 66505 readers) |
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A young Air Force nurse is caught going AWOL and having an adulterous affair. She is given two choices: court martial or volunteer for a medical program as a demonstration tool. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jan 9, 2005 |
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This is a provisional score. I do disagree with your decision to reverse the first and second parts of the first chapter. I hope you won't be doing that with future installments. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
skullchaser
(Edit) (Jan 9, 2005)
- Yeah, I wasn't sure how to get this one started. I was hoping I could get away with getting to the action quicker and then going back to fill in the story background as to how the woman ended up in the situation. You may be right. I should re-write the start to keep it linear so that I can maintain a steadily-increasing tempo rather than interrupt the flow of the story. This story will develop into harder stuff over a progression of scenes, certainly harder than my other two stories since the heroine won't have as much control as in my other stories.
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longrover
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Jan 8, 2005 |
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An interesting setup and a good start. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
skullchaser
(Edit) (Jan 8, 2005)
- This story is derived from another story I had started, stopped, and started again. Ideally I'd like to find someone to co-author the story with me. Hence, the open-ended premise. I suppose things can get as rough as we want to get, but with a gradual escalation. I'm thinking that her assignment will be to be a gynecological model in a medical classroom or auditorium setting for medical cadets, then progress to demonstrations of female sexual stimulation, and perhaps continue on from there as a test subject for new forms of torture and interrogation. At least, that's my plan for now. I just don't know what those forms of torture will be just yet.
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