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Maliia's Nightmare
Author: Maliia Kanaulahu
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(Added on Jan 8, 2005)
(This month 73751 readers) (Total 122264 readers) |
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Two Asian college roommates who have a secret attraction to each other take part in a psychology experiment that is either a nightmare or a dream depending on your point of view and they are pierced and modified, bound and controlled as slavegirls and eventually forced to serve in any humiliating capacity. |
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| Reviewer:
pert
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May 18, 2006 |
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I liked this story a lot but was rather disappointed that this is just a teaser for your website. I would be very happy to see more added to this story but am not holding my breath. (9/10)
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bracemaiden
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Feb 19, 2005 |
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I have to agree with Lex. The intro of drugging lacked originality, and the "well, you agreed, so you're stuck" seems trite. Well written, but with not enough "stuff" to write from. (6/10)
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browndog
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Jan 24, 2005 |
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most enjoyable looking forward to part 2 (8/10)
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njduda
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Jan 9, 2005 |
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very well written (8/10)
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lex ludite
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Jan 9, 2005 |
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Well written, yes, a high degree of originality, no. Erotic, definitely! Degree of kinkiness, high. Plot development, average to good for the type of material it is. Addictive breast milk was a good touch, but piercing, giant breasts and long nipples on tiny bodies has been done to death. Overall it was entertaining, but I think I'll be getting off at this stop. (6/10)
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skullchaser
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Jan 8, 2005 |
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Nice twist on a genre premise. I like that you established a relationship between the two characters. Very hot stuff, good start. I was into it up until the main character came out of her sedation, then it wasn't my taste. Still, a nice start. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
skullchaser
(Edit) (Jan 9, 2005)
- The more I thought about it, the more I think this story might play out better if Miko was the one that set up Maliia to do the experiment, rather than have both of them be the victim. Perhaps the experiment should be to determine how hot Maliia can get while bound to the table. You've already established an attraction of Maliia to Miko, so why not exploit that? The Japanese research assistant could place electrodes on Maliia's body to measure her body's responses to Miko's stimulations, and measure how long Miko can keep Maliia on the verge of a climax. A woman exploring her sub tendencies could be very interesting. Just a direction you might want to explore.
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mkemse
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Jan 8, 2005 |
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i enjoed the story, the layout very easy to read, i hope you do decide to add more chapters (8/10)
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