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Midnight-Pearl
Author: Eve Adorer
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(Added on Dec 11, 2004)
(This month 115950 readers) (Total 159525 readers) |
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At eighteen, Emma would be faced with choices, two apparent and another less obvious. The two apparent choices were college life followed by work in office or laboratory; or a career as a glamour model. The former was worthy but dull; the latter lucrative, but considered by Emma to be demeaning. Unknown to her however, there was a third "choice" for which Emma was being carefully rounded up: a future of severe restraint and fearsome discipline; but a future of wonderful fulfilment. |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 26, 2006 |
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well laid out, thought out and it flows real well (8/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jul 13, 2005 |
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Now here's a story with a great build-up... Though some may think the intro is overly spun-out and lengthy, I am convinced of the contrary...
For not one second I have found the first part of the story sorry, weak nor boring, as it is a nicely spinning-wheel, spinning and weaving the characters' characters, putting the personalities on the map and building-up a stamina...
Another thing I so do like about Eve Adorer's style, is the invention of non-existing words, thus putting them to existence and good use. I feel it is the writer's privilege to do so, to expand to a place beyond dictionaries, ethymological, logical or otherwise. As long as the readers know what it is all about, and in Eve Adorer's case, it is obviously obvious...
Furthermore, the use of the "girlie-talk" or "baby-pony-girlie-talk" is simply sublime... I mean, I've seen parents and/or horsekeepers go further out of their way in purring little non-senses to both infants and hyppo's alike...
Maybe Eve Adorer should write a follow-up, entitled "The Pony-Girl Whisperer"...
Sublime story with great characterizations of character...
Again, many a thanks for your contribution, Eve Adorer...
JJ (10/10)
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jbowler65
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Jun 14, 2005 |
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This was quite an enjoyable story. We always enjoyed the details in a story and the author does not disappoint. Keep up the great writing as we have enjoyed all your stories so far. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dancing Hateful Thin
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Feb 15, 2005 |
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I'm half-in and half-out on this one. On the one hand, you have a fairly well-written porn story - it's fairly erotic, it's got an interesting plot and so forth, and it hits all of the right buttons.
On the other hand, while there's also lots of people being tortured, the English language also gets a thorough beating in the bargain. The constant repetition grates, as if the author is affected with some odd short-term memory loss that mandates that every point be reyped eight or nine times before she's sure that we've got the idea. You can't scream "ENOUGH! WE GET THE POINT!" at the story, but Lord, you're surely be tempted.
And the baby talk - good Lord, I came close to insulin shock from all of the sugar. Nobody can talk like that for long before they lapse into prehuman grunts or simply burst out laughing; it's jarring, rather than interesting. And the girlI girlwent girlto girlthe girlstore thing almost rears its ugly head before the author gets it under control again.
It's an interesting story, and it's a talented author, but the gimmicks are getting too thick to make it a worthwhile read. Otherwise, it'd be professionally publishable.
(6/10)
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- Replied by:
Eve Adorer
(Edit) (Feb 15, 2005)
- Thank you for your opinion.
I only write for fun.
Don't take it so seriously!
EA
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longrover
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Jan 6, 2005 |
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An excellent story with well chosen-detail, although there is a lot of it. I'm about half way through what's posted so far and enjoying it very much. By the end, the detail and baby talk fit perfectly. Well done! Might there be (I hesitate to ask) more? Several tanalizing hints and the narrator's identity suggest that there might be. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Eve Adorer
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2005)
- Thank you for your positive review. Have just discovered this means of reply so my thanks, though delayed, are not too late I hope!
EA
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Mobius
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Dec 24, 2004 |
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Long way to much detail. Very good plot I always love a good lesbian seduction even thoug they have not consumated and so far it ends with her being turned into a pony. Looking forward to more please (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Eve Adorer
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2005)
- "...way too much detail"! It did include "slow" in the list of attributes or whatever they are!! Prefer the journey to the arrival sometimes myself. Thanks for the positive review elsewise. Hope the "more" you got was the kind of more you were looking for, and did not disappoint!
EA
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