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Evening Out
Author: Lia
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(Added on Nov 28, 2004)
(This month 12506 readers) (Total 21224 readers) |
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A sub and her Master go to a private bondage club for the first time. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
DaSade
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Dec 14, 2004 |
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One of the things I liked best about this story was that it this experience was 100% real. I happen to be the person who owns the young woman who received the birthday spankings. I am glad the author enjoyed the evening, and my wife still remembers the author as "An extremely lovely woman" whom she hopes to get to know better in the future. If you are looking to know what reality is like as opposed to a fantasy night, this is the story to read. BTW, when I first saw the 10/11, I thought it might be the author's owner saying that on a scale of 1 to 10, she was an 11 (ala. Spinal Tap). (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Breannefun
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Dec 2, 2004 |
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I'm not the author the other reviewers are and for me, I thought the story was a nice light introduction into the world, realistic too. It was tame, but not all stories are written to stimulate the reader's sex drive. This is a perfect opportunity for the author to write a sequel, letting the characters go back to the club, this time auctioning the girl off. Or do I have to recommend to the author to get her master to take her back there and be...courageous? (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Nov 28, 2004 |
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There's not too much here. It's sort of like reading an off kilter version of my trip to the movies or some such thing. I get the feeling that it's more truth than fiction, but I'm not up for any more of this one since it's too tame and lacks any spark of originality. The writing is adequate and the author could probably turn out a pretty good story if the subject matter was more interesting. (4/10)
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bisarah
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Nov 28, 2004 |
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"the people were mostly large" and "there was no doubt that i was the most attractive girl in the place"!!! yikes, that is some ego you have there, girl! your story is very underdeveloped and perhaps you might want to re-think your whole "the world loves me" mentality because it distracts from your story. (4/10)
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chksng19
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Nov 28, 2004 |
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Not entirely fulfilling. The premise is interesting: it's always fun the first time. The narrative is a little superficial, however. "He spanked me for 10 minutes" doesn't give the reader any emotion to help excite them. This reads as though it may have happened to the author, but needs more detail filled out to really be erotic.
Don't get me wrong; the writing is fine, good grammar, spelling, all that. More emotion, however, would make it lots more fun, and more tittilating... which is what an erotic story is for! (6/10)
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