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Execution of the Terrorist Housewives
Author: Jill Crokett
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(Added on Nov 14, 2004)
(This month 234665 readers) (Total 467369 readers) |
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Three beautiful young women are found guilty of participation in an act of mass terrorism and condemned to an unspeakable fate. |
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traumaemt
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Aug 3, 2016 |
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Very good story. I wish you would have wrote what happened after the troops started arriving. Was everyone that was imprisoned released? Were all of the guard and the warden punished? What happens now? But still a great story! (10/10)
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teleya
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May 15, 2011 |
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very impressive writing, first half is terrific - a definite 10. The second half is more of seeking tortures for torture sake. avg rating would be a 8.5 (9/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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can;t believe i missed this one (9/10)
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kittkatt
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Jan 20, 2007 |
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Well written, great story line. One of my favorite authors on this site. (9/10)
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Mothbrad
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Nov 18, 2006 |
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A fantastic story that I was sure I had already reviewed. Perhaps I emailed the author in the past instead? I can't remember. I'm a big fan of the 'fake pregnancy' part, and more or less everything else in it. Keep up the great work. (9/10)
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dnagirl
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Sep 1, 2006 |
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Enjoying very much, can't wait for next chapter. Imaginative, realistic, and creative. your well versed in science and the medical field. Please don’t stop, you are truly talented. (10/10)
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chksng19
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May 9, 2006 |
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This is a fairly well-written piece. The story does grab you eventually (although it takes a while to get there). Looking forward to more.
And more has made a difference. As the story proceeds, despite spell checker ('a mound' is not 'amount', the correct word) and grammatical (plurals do not get " 's ", simply " s "; " 's " is only for contractions or possessives),
it has gotten significantly better, and more exciting. a change in score is certainly justified, upwards.
Something to do with prisons is "penal" not "penile". "Penile" has to do with the penis.
May 9: the story continues to improve, and to tittilate. Very well done! (10/10)
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sheilagirl
(Edit) (Oct 6, 2005)
- In my opinion these misspellings are due to a faulty voice recognition system. Nobody could spell/type that bad. Could they? I noticed many times words that didn't even fit although they sounded similar. I'm not knocking the story at all. It's awesome.
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Dick the Slaver
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Dec 19, 2005 |
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I enjoyed the story. We need more chapters. (7/10)
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sheilagirl
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Oct 6, 2005 |
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I would have given you a 10 for content but had to take off for the spell check/voice recognition errors. The only way to fix those is to painstakingly go through the piece and rewrite what you had intended to write. (9/10)
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La Toya
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Oct 1, 2005 |
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Was thinking I had already rated this story, and found I hadn't. I dont make it a habit of rating a story 10, right off. This story is a TRUE 10 (10/10)
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WhiteFang
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Aug 31, 2005 |
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Creative and imaginative, yet realistic. It is not a 10 due to spelling and grammatical errors. I am looking forward toward more chapters. (9/10)
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Oden
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Aug 27, 2005 |
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I have to agree with Powerone. This story starts out bad by listing the main characters. The reader is also reminded constantly about the main characters appearances and age. The plot is interesting and would probably work very well as a short story but due to the constant reviews the plot develops to slowly and the characters become to clinical.The technical writing skills are fair and the writer is not without talent. (6/10)
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Reddbunnz
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Apr 20, 2005 |
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I can't wait for Chapter 4! (9/10)
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eaglefruit
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Mar 9, 2005 |
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The whipmaster is a hot figure. It would be interesting to hear a bit more about his feelings and his "training". (8/10)
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Llabmik
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Jan 17, 2005 |
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I love it so far. I trust that these thoroughly traumatised females will be putting out for the boys (and perhaps the girls?) before their ingeniously anguished snuff. I like the descriptions of the apparatus and the processing of the female victims. I can picture it all quite nicely. Teasing me on as I wonder 'what does she have in mind here?' when the sentences are handed out only makes me eager to read more. I'm a sucker for a naughty little tease. (10/10)
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Grey Slayer
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Nov 25, 2004 |
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Off to a good start. I am interested to read what exotic and brutal treatment awaits the ladies in future chapters. (8/10)
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LordVetinari
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Nov 20, 2004 |
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Another good one. The author has a talent for cruelty, ritualistic cruelty. Not many can pull it off. (8/10)
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davidcarnival
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Nov 17, 2004 |
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Very good, story will be interested in reading the next part. (8/10)
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Powerone
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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I liked the other one better then this one. This is erotica, none found in this chapter. The story starts off bad, listing the main characters their ages and marital status. A story is like advertising, you have to catch the readers attention in the first fifteen seconds. I even skipped through the paragraph after paragraph of details, looking for something. All I got was a prolog for a story called "Execution". Too many details, not enough story. Will read the next chapter and see if I can find some erotica, if not that will be the last chance for this reader.
(6/10)
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longrover
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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A politically interesting, believable story. I would have liked to know more about the offenders than that they suffered from poor cash flow. Given their society, that seems like an inadequate motive. It was easier to infer a motive for those who were condemned in "Execution by the Reich." A recent series of stories relied on random chance and voluntary sale, but there is no hint of that here. Perhaps all will become clear in a sequel, and my rating will change. A good start and well written, in any case. (8/10)
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pippa
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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LOved this so far-I like stories that set up a scene realistically once you accept the initial premise. The detail was brill and very well described and written.Please keep the story going as I am awaiting eagerly the rest. (10/10)
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