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Execution of a Soccer Mom
Author: Jill Crokett
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(Added on Nov 3, 2004)
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Beautiful 36yr old wife and mother is sentence, punitively punished and put to death in futuristic society. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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just ok (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
jcrokett
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Mar 20, 2005 |
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thx Jill for the snuff stuff! (10/10)
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chksng19
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Mar 17, 2005 |
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This story takes one more step along the "capital punishment" walk. A tough question to answer in some cases; not in this one.
Very well done story, literate and clear. Reasons for each action are given, clear descriptions and resolution of the conflict keep the reader tightly into the tale.
Nicely done!
Sorry, but this one needs lowering. Not due to content: that still is most interesting. However the editing (whoever is doing that for you) is accepting spell-checker word choices, instead of checking for the correct word.
It's just too distracting (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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your writing skills are good, but a bit dispassionate. and don't tease me by telling me her head is going to be shaved and then fail to do it!!! lol (6/10)
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lex ludite
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Nov 27, 2004 |
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The background did set the stage for the execution, but all things considered, the act itself did not produce any heat. It was rather cold and dispassionate, much like those of today. I don't see much hope for anything different when it comes to offing the daughter. As far as the medical jargon, it did not serve any purpose as far as I could see. (6/10)
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longrover
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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The writing is technically fine (grammar, sentences, etc.) but the offense that gave rise to the story seemed mundane to me compared to your other stories. There is less connection to your political point here than in them, less reason to understand why society might have changed as you describe. The judicial structure is less clear here as well, although it seems to be the one that appears in other stories. Compared to material on this site, the story is fine. Compared to your other work, it could use improvement. (6/10)
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LordVetinari
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Nov 5, 2004 |
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This was hot. So delightfully cruel, so sophisticatedly barbaric! Do write more! (9/10)
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Dododecapod
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Nov 3, 2004 |
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I liked the clinical and precise terminology, like a medical description. The large chunk of exposition at the beginning explaining the society were thus made less intrusive, and the imagination left free to consider the implications of what was occuring.
Actually, the only thing that bothered me was the bit about the daughter at the end; it seemed unnecessary, and interrupted the flow of the story.
Otherwise, excellent. (8/10)
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