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What Price Power
Author: faith
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(Added on Sep 20, 2004)
(This month 52624 readers) (Total 71628 readers) |
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She would pay any price to have a her share of the power...but was the price to steep? |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Feb 7, 2006 |
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Interesting story about greed. Good moral!
The ideas are good, the characters fairly well defined. Why not take care of the small problems and then resubmit it? I'm sure you'll draw more readers, and get a higher score.
Your master probably loved the story. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Ruby
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Sep 25, 2004 |
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Congratulations - not only is the story hot, but it nicely combines a legendary creature with
a mortal in an unexpected outcome. Perhaps
our heroine is just starting her adventure?
I agree with the advice of the other reviewers. A bit of editing could help take this story from an 8 to an easy 10. I look forward to reading the next version...and please do give us a part II.
Does she fall in love with the monster?
Will he take her out to play?
What does she gain from her submission?
More please, please! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Sep 22, 2004 |
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I LOVED reading " What Price Power ". She obviously had no grandparents or simply didn't listen b/c mine were always telling me to be careful what you wish for ! I loved the way you gave the price of greed a new twist. I had not seen this approach. It was a welcome change. The story was straight forward and easy to follow. I also think you did a good job with the pace you set for the story b/c it matched her urgency and impatience. It fit pretty nicely in one part. I think you could have done it in too parts, kept up the pace and done maybe a little more character detail esp. about Minataur. A guy that hideous usually just doesn't fall from the sky. Again, I really enjoyed reading your story and I hope to see more. (8/10)
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