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Extracts Of Fear
Author: littlered
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(Added on Sep 11, 2004)
(This month 52318 readers) (Total 68808 readers) |
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Diffrent sides of one story, how somthing so small can soon become out of control and the importance of comunication. |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Tavy
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Oct 19, 2011 |
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Was quite enjoying this story but the ending was a bit disappointing (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 15, 2004 |
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The jury is still out on this one, some say great, a few middle of the roaders, some poor. I would congratulate you on the idea; while not 'Springtime Fresh", it is a rarely attempted one, and does indeed illustrate the need for clearer communications always between partners.
Is it BDSM? In a way; the two are so bound up in their own thoughts, they become abusive to each other. (Oh, yes; she is abusive too! Not working on a relationship is another form of abuse).
Spelling is a bugaboo, but is easily taken care of with a checker or (in the case of the checker picking the wrong word to correct it to) a real human editor. Nice ones exist in abundance here; just ask.
Original thinking always earns a cheer in my reviews, as 'the same old song' gets boring. Now start excavating that gold mine for another fresh idea, and get a little help. Can't wait to see your next efforts!
Regarding the one-star review; it's easy to criticize or flame (and that seems to be one; it certainly would be deleted in one of my groups), but hard to do better. Has THAT individual contributed any stories here? (5/10)
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- Replied by:
littlered
(Edit) (Sep 15, 2004)
- thanks for the honesty chksng, thats what i realy apreciate. it seems as though THAT individual has contributed although being bitchy isnt exactly my thing. 'shrugs' i use microsoft word and it can be a right cow somtimes although i never was any good at spelling :) as far as im concerned its the content that matters hopefully im gettting better, guess time will tell if im realy cut out for it or not.
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mkemse
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Sep 13, 2004 |
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Just average, nothing outstanding in the story (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
foundling
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Sep 13, 2004 |
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i thought it was really enjoyable and inspiringly new keep it up red (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dododecapod
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Sep 11, 2004 |
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Not really BDSM, from my point of view, but nevertheless a good description of a man self-destructing into a nightmare of wife abuse and self loathing. You get a real feel for the emotions of both parties, and can really see the disintegrative effects of each person's assumptions and expectations, and their total failure to communicate.
I especially liked the progressive increase in the husband's domestic violence, from "Accidental" blows to rape and restraint; I found it very realistic, if a little compressed (which is reasonable artistic licence).
Frankly, the only thing that bothered me was spelling; the grammar was quite reasonable for Diary entries, but I would have given the story a significantly higher rating if you'd run it through a spellchecker. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Sep 11, 2004 |
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The mispelled words and the awful grammar makes this a very unreadable story.
If English isn't your first language, then please find someone to proof your work. (2/10)
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- Replied by:
MasterRJ
(Edit) (Sep 11, 2004)
- I can proof-read your work if you want. I'm starting to become quite the fan of yours. Although I really only cassually flipped through the beggining and skipped to the end. So shoot me I'm lazy :P
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foundling
(Edit) (Sep 13, 2004)
- theres no need to be spitefull and vindictive thats my area personly i enjoyed it and thought the two sides thing was new and inventive
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