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The PIG
Author: Paladin
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(Added on Aug 23, 2004)
(This month 167661 readers) (Total 260124 readers) |
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Unfaithful wife meets the 'farmer'. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5/10) |
| Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
banderson
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Mar 7, 2005 |
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I agree that the grammar and spelling are rather poor. And a spellcheck may not catch many of the homophones (i.e., they're vs. their vs. there; or plain vs. plane.) However, this story does show a delightfully devilish plot and style. With any kind of effort, I'd rate this a seven. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Mar 5, 2005 |
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The story meandered between first person and third person without any reason. That, in itself made the reading difficult. The lack of proper editing was another major drawback to the story. That is to say that the grammar was atrocious and the spelling was, as well. It was due to these factors that the story failed to flow or keep my interest long enough to get to the conclusion. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mistress Blue
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Sep 27, 2004 |
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You had a lot of potential here. Unfortunately you can't spell your way out of a paper bag if your life depended on it. Grammar - atrocious. Spelling - even worse. Believe the others who tell you that spellcheck is necessary as well as a dictionary and a thesaurus. It really takes away from the telling of your tale and stops the story's flow. (Notice how I punctuated story. It's not storees or stories'). If you want people to read and enjoy your work put a little bit of effort into the writing. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Sep 9, 2004 |
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I like the concept of these stories, but the poor grammar, wrong word usage, and bad spelling take away from them. Fix your errors. If English isn't your first language, then invest in a good English spell check program. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
woolfighter
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Sep 4, 2004 |
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I like your stories, even this one reminds me "Ruthie becomes a PIG" in its first chapter.
If there are errors I've overread them totally absorbed. Really, great story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Aug 28, 2004 |
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Long, cliched, and poorly written. When an
author doesn't even trouble himself to run a
spell check, he's admitting he doesn't care at
all about his readers (or, even minimally,
about the quality of story he's producing).
So why should we care? (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Aug 26, 2004 |
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Despite the deliberate use of incorrect versions of certain words, and the less than professional editing, there are so many good things about this little horror story that they overwhelm the warts. The characters all fit together perfectly in this day time nightmare. There is plenty of heat at all the right times and Bethany is a pervert's wet dream come to life. The breaking down of Pig's personality into its lowest common denominator is done very well. I recommend this one to those interested in something that has a lot more substance than it appears to possess at first blush. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
sunburststrat
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Aug 25, 2004 |
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I thought it had potential but there was too much sick stuff for me. (4/10)
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