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The Charity Auction
Author: Rocky
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(Added on Jul 23, 2004)
(This month 182532 readers) (Total 244819 readers) |
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A professional woman discovers that fantasy and reality are not at all the same when she offers herself as "property" to be sold at her favorite charity's annual fund raising event. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Deanna
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Oct 12, 2006 |
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These guys are writing about killing girls. Sick motherfuckers belong in jail where some big nigger will stick his cock up your worthless guts and cut your throat. Megan's Law faggots. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Nov 18, 2006)
- Hey, dipshit, did you even read the fucking story? I doubt it, because there is only one story I've ever written that involved death, but you keep harping on it with every review you write. Why the fuck are you even on BDSM Library, bitch? What are you, a member of that idiot church in Kansas?
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littleone_
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Aug 10, 2006 |
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This is truly amazing and sexy story. I love it form the very start. Except for a couple of items that were difficult to understand, like how she was bound in her cage that were not clear, it was professional level erotic literature. There were also some things that I think should not be encouraged, like having panties shoved in the slaves mouth. That is because they could be swallowed and choke her to death. The story is erotic, mostly credible and the author has covered all the bases of a good fantasy while keeping it sexy. In other works by this author he did a better job of capturing the mind of the victims/girls who were central to it. But perhaps that is intentional on his part in this one as it does aid the reader in seeing her as an object and that appears to be the theme of this story rather then the girls angst. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Aug 25, 2006)
- Sorry for the delay in replying to your review; for soem reason, I'm not getting the e-mail alerts. I started this story over a decade before it was posted here, and looking back on some of my older, unpublished work, believe I was better able to describe the mindset of the characters back then. It seems I'm now more into descriptions of the physical scenes rather than get into the characters' minds, though I don't really know why that is. I always appreciate your reviews, both of my own works and those of others, because they provide such encouragement and valuable feedback. So, once again, thanks!
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BigCat
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Aug 3, 2005 |
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Over the top, but well done. (10/10)
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pejanon
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Jul 6, 2005 |
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One of the better stories in the 'she tought she'll give it a try and got more than she bargained for' department. A LOT more. And why the hell not? Nice plotting actually, even if Rockyclaimis there isn't much of it. More and extreme stuff comes naturally.
Loved crossing with Memoirs ... (or was it vice versa?) (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 17, 2005)
- Thanks. I had no idea where this story was going when I first started writing. It seemed to have a life of its own, at least at first. I still believe it is somewhat disjointed, if only due to the fact that the first chapters were written over ten years before last half. As for the cross-over, this story was first.
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| Reviewer:
teamster
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Aug 1, 2004 |
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enjoyable longish story, if not particularly original. without egregious errors in spelling or punctuation etc. maybe your slave girl could have used a few more piercings to go with the rest of her body mods. (8/10)
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lex ludite
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Jul 25, 2004 |
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A very impressive debut as far as this reader is concerned. This one may have been worth the ten years it took to refine. The author manages to cover most of the waterfront, push every button worth pushing and even throws in a happy ending of sorts. The amount of heat this one generates is right up there with the best of them. Even the over the top stuff such as those incredible beatings, the juicy and juicing heroine, orgasm control, etc, seem to fit right in. Finally, and most importantly, the author writes well, a critical component sometimes lost in the heat of creativity. My compliments to Rocky for a job very well done. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 25, 2004)
- Thanks for the encouragement. I do have to admit that although I did start the story back around 1985 or so, it was lost for a long time. A generous reader who happened to have it saved e-mailed the original work to me a few months back. As far as the plot goes...I started typing, and the story seemed to take on a life of its own. I didn't even know how it was going to end until my fingers hit the keyboard.
I do tend to be my own harshest critic, though, and was a bit upset at myself when I saw a typo in the very first paragraph. Next time (assuming I have another story in me), I'll do a better job of proofreading.
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Jul 24, 2004 |
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While this story was long, i was very intrigued by it. The writing was excellent! However, I don't think any woman could stand up with a 14-inche waist! LOL (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 25, 2004)
- Looking at it realistically, I guess that was a bit over the top. But, hey...it's a fictional story, so why not?
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| Reviewer:
longrover
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Jul 24, 2004 |
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A good story from a plot, character, dialogue, and description point of view. The relatively large number of awkwardly chosen words and phrases reduced its score. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 24, 2004)
- Thanks for the comments and constructive criticism. My focus was on drawing a mental picture for the reader, which may have contributed to the perceived awkwardness. Should I write anything in the future for publication, I'll keep this in mind.
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| Reviewer:
lahrling
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Jul 23, 2004 |
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This is one of the best stories I have read on this quality site. It could (and should) be published with very little--heh heh--modification. The chapters are nice and short and well balanced, it builds nicely to a climax, and the characters are decently drawn.
There is one small problem I have with this story and it's a small one, but one of my pet peeves. I counted at least three places where the author uses 'it's' for 'its'. In this case, the difference of an apostrophy is huge. It's = it is. its = possessive of it. Fixing that one problem could seriously improve the author's chances of getting this piece published in print. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Rocky
(Edit) (Jul 24, 2004)
- Unfortunately, I noticed this (and a couple of other grammer/spelling errors) after I'd submitted it to the site. I actually DO know the difference...just sometimes the fingers type faster than the brain can follow!
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jul 23, 2004 |
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I realy enjoyed it, i love long detailed stories and the fact that donna has no control over her life, she is at the comple mirsy of her mistress,
when it come to this type type, the longer the better, the more detailed the better (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
woolfighter
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Jul 23, 2004 |
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A little bit too long, but worth reading. (8/10)
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