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Sense of Responsibility
Author: ProtagorasII
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(Added on Jun 12, 2004)
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Linda works for Social Services and has daily encounters with dysfunctional and underprivileged families. Join her as she explores some life changing experiences. |
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jun 15, 2004 |
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In general this is a well written story, but the editing could have been better in some sections. Of interest it was in one of the more heated paragraphs that there appeared to be a complete breakdown in writing discipline. The use of words such as "whaled",(wailed, perhaps?) "howled" and "gratification" seemed totally inappropriate based on the rest of Linda's language. The ending had more positive than negative aspects, but the abrupt change in the heroine's sexual outlook just does not ring true. However granting the author this one does make the ending most appropriate. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
ProtagorasII
(Edit) (Jun 16, 2004)
- Thanks Lex
Useful comments as ever. You are correct of course - wrote this piece in a single one hour sitting and didnt even proof read or re- write - just posted. Lesson to be learnt. Thanks.
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