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Black Horse - or Sheep?
Author: Carl L.
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(Added on May 2, 2004)
(This month 16301 readers) (Total 28940 readers) |
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This is a simple tale of the misadventures of a foolish young girl, taken and used for amusement - at first - by a man who can see the seamier side of life working to his advantage. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 24, 2009 |
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Not in the mood to come up with my own review, I completely aknowledge to what both rafu and chameleon have said.
Excellently balanced story.
JJ (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Carl L.
(Edit) (Nov 15, 2010)
- Hi Jimmy,
Just saw your review of my story. Thanks for your kind comments.
Would be glad to provide more direct if you wish. Write me at SMOgo62629@aol.com
Cheers, Carl.
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| Reviewer:
chameleon
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May 26, 2004 |
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Deliciously dark and decadent, without any gratuitous explicitness. It's a well-wrought, well-written little tale that chills and titilates without any need to resort to 'shock' value. The narrator's tone is wonderfully consistent throughout - relishing his story without any apology for his callous treatment of the young girl. I seldom rate stories this high, but this one totally deserves the rating. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
rafu
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May 6, 2004 |
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This is a very unsettling story. What struck me most was the almost docile manner in which the girl accepts her imprisonment. It is horribly plausible, and very chilling. She gently bargains, weighs up her options, double-guesses, submits to all that is inevitable. She remains self-conscious, vacillitating, and human to the end. The way in which she half-voluntarily removes her bra the third afternoon is a memorable detail. So too is her first reaction to the cane, before she wordlessly submits to it: “She put both hands to her face in horror and groaned a long, "Nooooo!" The sentence perfectly describes her grief - and her simultaneous resignation.
There is a real coldness at the heart of this story, which comes from the narrator himself in spite of all his Mediterrenean sensuousness. His callousness is worsened by his intelligence. He is all too aware of the girl as a living, breathing, thinking entity, even as degrades her. (I was reminded a little of Humbert and Lolita, no small compliment.) It is this that makes his ruthless destruction of her so appalling.
On a subjective note this is rather too grim for me, especially the ending. (If this your 'Light', I'll steer well clear of your 'Heavy'!) And I’m not convinced that it flows from the black horse paragraph. What the narrator does not feel for the girl is passion. Nevertheless this is powerful, harrowing stuff. (10/10)
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