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Belle Meets Master
Author: Belleerotique
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(Added on Mar 30, 2004)
(This month 11933 readers) (Total 18310 readers) |
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A shy sub meets her online master for a weekend of depraved love. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 29, 2005 |
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it has the potential to be a real killer story (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
renko
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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Average story line, but lacking any of the pyschological play that exists in agood D/s relationship (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
fetish101
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Mar 31, 2004 |
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I agree with Norcod..it's lacking in being anything other than a 3rd person doing a play by play. It would have been much better if we knew a little bit more about how master jon enslaved belle, why she felt she needed to be enslaved, what she thinks as these events happen to her, perhaps what master jon thinks as he's doing them etc..
None the less, it was well written with little to no grammatical errors that I could easily pick out on a first read. This story/author shows promise. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Mar 30, 2004 |
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How does one say it, all the parts are there but somehow the thing falls short. A competent but very standard pain slut fantasy, quick but superficial. What it lacks is the long slow build of great erotic fiction. This author can describe action. They now need to work on nuance, novel plot twists, filling out the characters so that you come to like (or hate) them. Don't be afraid to describe the setting and the action in great detail. Feel free to literally paint a picture with words. In terms of the action, you are laying out everything I love, now make it graphic.
Good luck and my rating can (and frequently does) change as the story progresses! (6/10)
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