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No Sin Goes Unpunished
Author: lisa
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(Added on Feb 23, 2004)
(This month 79121 readers) (Total 110620 readers) |
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Friends plan a rape/torture weekend never suspection a judgement day will come. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Sojurboy
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Nov 14, 2010 |
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I actually thought this was quite well done, though the violence was a little overdone, The story line was intriguing, and Lisa got the fundamentals down pat on the feelings one would have in a degrading situation like the one Holly was in. I must say that if she had dwelled more on the psychological feelings, and less on the actual brutality, this story would have been a five star event!!! As far as the technical skills involved in the writing, I'll leave that up to your English teacher. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 6, 2005 |
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ok, not close to beeing great it made a good read and that was about it (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Mar 9, 2004 |
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To be honest, this story was probably only worth a '7', but I upgraded it to counter lex's '3'. The editing is a serious problem and I hope you'll take steps to upgrade it before you post additional chapters, but the story was hot. If you hadn't glossed over days two and three in one paragraph, you actually would've earned your '8'. Since this is obviously set up for future 'revenge' chapters, please update your story codes if you include any F/m or anything else not covered in the initial codes. I see this was your first story, at least at this site, and as a first effort it wasn't bad, but you really have to improve the editing. Good luck. (edit) Not such good luck, it seems. If anything, the editing got worse with the second installment. Rating downgraded accordingly. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
teamster
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Mar 7, 2004 |
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okay rape fantasy but it runs on a bit and somehow it lacks emotional punch. you get sick and tired of the victims whimpering and sniveling after a while. are we supposed to feel sorry for her? thats just depressing. (5/10)
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lex ludite
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Mar 1, 2004 |
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I'll start at the beginning which featured a run-on sentence that was in excess of 120 words. I can only presume that the author was trying to put down on paper the random, jumbled thoughts that were going through the brain of this cardboard cutout character. You get credit for trying to do it, but your execution was terrible, getting in the way of this reader's attempt to figure what the devil this story was all about. We'll skip over the non-sentences, some of which were two words long, another bad idea. Next you provide an incredible amount of meaningless background and trivial information concerning the preparation for the kidnapping and subsequent abuse of the only character that seemed to have some substance to her. From this point, it's all downhill, sex and violence by the numbers. Even here you fail to generate the kind of heat that a more experienced writer could have done in half the time. Then for the big finish. Sorry, it's kind of vague and weak. I won't bother to mention in detail the terrible editing and proofing that just added to the misery I experienced. On balance I've read worse, lots worse. However that is no excuse for giving this mediocre effort any more than it deserves. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
bdsmbill
(Edit) (Feb 24, 2004)
- Gosh, Lex, don't beat around the bush. Tell us what you really think.
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| Reviewer:
bojaz
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Feb 28, 2004 |
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Story lacks details (5/10)
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jbowler65
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Feb 26, 2004 |
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Good start in the premise, but some editing is needed. Some clean up in the sentence and paragraph structure will help greatly. Hopefully there will be some twists and turns in later chapters. (6/10)
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bdsmbill
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Feb 24, 2004 |
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The premise wasn't new, but you certainly did it in a very complete way. You do need to get someone to proofread your work. Keep in mind as you read the reviews that a lot of us here on this site are sadists, and we like to say mean things. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Feb 25, 2004)
- I think that the author is owed the truth, warts and all. If you have an opinion, you should try to at least back it with some facts. To me, writing is a critical factor in any review. Truly bad writing must be exposed for what it is. Undisciplined drivel that breaks most, if not all the rules of grammar, coupled with sloppy proofing is an insult to the reader! Examples are provided to back this opinion. This takes up space and time, but it's the least any author deserves from a review. Think about that the next time you scribble down a rating and write one or perhaps two bland sentences to go with it. Personally I think this rate by the numbers scheme still has serious flaws and puts most reviewers in a strait jacket.
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e.e. norcod
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Feb 23, 2004 |
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A competently written but otherwise run of the mill abduction and rape story. The quality of writing is above average although the story is blighted by the usual malapropisms that escape spelchek. Let's see what further installments bring. Novelty, surprising twists, character development and some good old fashioned c.p. will help to raise the rating. (7/10)
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