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Fresh Executive Assistant
Author: RedGreenBlueMan
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(Added on Feb 16, 2004)
(This month 10419 readers) (Total 23728 readers) |
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He needs a new executive assistant with some passion, she needs a job that lets her be passionate. Hey, this could work out for everyone. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Feb 24, 2004 |
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I think the story has promise. So far, the sex is vague, the need for a "slow" tag is arguable. The author made a decent try at changing the point of view.
The boyfriend story, especially the leaving, is kind of hokey, but I'm sure it was a convenient plot device. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 24, 2004 |
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So far, this is a very well-written story with no sex. For people who like well-written stories, 'dis must be da place'. (7/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 19, 2004 |
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i had a real problem with the begining, the part of the story where Amy goes into detail about here up brininging and her boy friend was real way to long and not needed, i hioe in future chapters you will concentrate on the story and less on her past<br>i am willing to change and up my review and rating at that time
Early character develoment is fine as long as it does not take you away from the story line itself. I like build up and development as long as it's length suites the story, no offense was meant (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Wyn
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Feb 18, 2004 |
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I like the background the author provides. It allows me to (hopefully) get more in tune with what the author is trying to convey in his characters. I'm looking forward to reading more, but hope future chapters are more finely tuned. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Feb 17, 2004 |
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This initial offering passes muster as far as setting the stage for what is to come between these two people; at least I hope so. It is the writing style that intrigues me the most; sometimes fresh and breezy, other times it appears that the author didn't bother to clean up the imperfections that are not even noticed with bad writing, but which stand out like a sore thumb when they appear in a body of writing that is generally good. I hope that in future installments of this story more editing will be done before posting it. This story has the potential to be very good. It would be a shame to not take the opportunity to do some grunt work in order to make it stand out. (6/10)
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bdsmbill
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Feb 17, 2004 |
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I didn't have the same problem with the background stuff that mkemse did. I think some early character development is fine. I did, however, think you should have posted more in the first part. Too many authors make this mistake, and then readers have forgotten about it when the next part posts. (7/10)
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