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Missing the Cut
Author: Lex Ludite
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(Added on Jan 22, 2004)
(This month 75314 readers) (Total 171020 readers) |
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The continuing story of Micky Wilson after her abrupt retirement from professional golf at the tender age of 13. She now has to cope with her increasingly sexually aggressive father and a new challenge, his fiancee, a dominant bisexual with designs on Micky. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Dec 19, 2005 |
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At this point, I have to say its not has good as the first story. I will watch and see were it goes from here, and will think about up grading my rating.
12/19/2005--- Increase rating 10/10
Sorry it took so long to get back to reading this story. I loved the way you tied the two stories together. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Feb 28, 2005)
- I would tend to disagree with you, but this is because I know how this one works out, and you don't. The first chapter is larded with almost mindless violence, which was intentional. I enjoyed writing it, but I want to develop Micky into more than just a template for abuse. Be advised that her future is not free from pain and suffering, to the contrary. Check in with this one in another couple of chapters and see what you think then.
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lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 23, 2006)
- First of all, my apologies for not responding to your most appreciative review. Unfortunately there is no way for the site to let me know when someone changes their rating. This, plus the fact that I've been busy on some other stories, all conspired to make me miss your delightful surprise. Be advised that there are still plenty of twists and turns to discover as more characters such as Ping Pong, Micky's new pro instructor, who has attributes that keep Micky in a state of suspense from lesson to lesson, not to mention Nordica Nordstrom and her sex crazed caddy-husband who team up to cause all sorts of grief for our heroine, and finally the Pak family, an army of South Koreans who are out to rule the LPGA both on the course and in the showers. It should be a fun time for all, especially when you consider how this little tale of woe started.
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Oct 7, 2005 |
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I usually start reading one of your stories with one eye closed and probably should stay away since they aren't to my personal tastes. Just the same, despite the fact that I rarely like the story codes, I read on. As usual, your writing is quite good and your story compells completion. I think, sometimes, that I should not rate your tales, perhaps giving lower marks than the story quality deserves.
*I am thinking that you and Mad Lews should write a tale together and see if any characters survive with all their body parts still in tact. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2005)
- Your review is very much appreciated. I will admit that the opening chapter is pretty much over the top. Originally the first chapter was going to be all there was, since it was written merely to see if I still could crank out something filled with mindless violence. Later I went back and decided to make something a bit different out of this sow's ear. Stay with this one and you might be surprised at how things turn out.
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chksng19
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Jun 10, 2005 |
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Another good Ludite offering: one of many to be found here. As a fantasy, the story fills the bill. Some other reviewers may have been a little less than generous and have forgotten that the purpose of the review is whether the story is GOOD, not whether you necessarily liked it.
I liked it. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jun 10, 2005)
- Thanks for the kind words, they are most appreciated. Unfortunately the first 9 reviewers only were exposed to the first chapter of the story and they produced the usual distribution that nine blind reviewers would produce when confronted with an elephant. Since then the story has taken a distinct turn away from the slash and burn effort it originally started out to be. People may still like or dislike this one, but it's a whole lot different now, and will change even more as I begin to get really serious about turning this into something for the mind as well as the groin.
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Mar 12, 2005 |
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another good story from Lex! i am curious to see where it leads now ... (9/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Mar 13, 2005)
- My thanks for taking the time to offer your very generous review. Be advised that Micky's life will change significantly, and yet come full circle at the same time.
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| Reviewer:
LordVetinari
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Jan 8, 2005 |
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I liked the turn this story has taken, and am curious to see where it is going next. Do please continue. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 9, 2005)
- Your review and comments are appreciated. I too share your enthusiasm for the direction this story is now taking. Expect more of the same in future installments.
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| Reviewer:
Cokera
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Dec 9, 2004 |
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Well it made me bookmark your other writings. It was to the point but otherwise quite useless in of itself except to leave the reader wanting just a tad more of a beginning and end. I did see a "offshoot" story possible in the future for this one. Perhaps more like the other one I am beginning now. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Dec 12, 2004)
- I wrote this one in about an hour to make sure that certain aspects of my writing were still in good working order. The volume of reviews has been astonishing and most gratifying. Your review is particularly appreciatd since you seem to be systematically going through much of the work that I've produced in the last few years and giving me more than just one more blind man's view of this elephant.
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| Reviewer:
littleslut
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Jun 18, 2004 |
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a good story i just wish it could have been a bit longer to get my imagination flowing a bit more but good none the less (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jun 20, 2004)
- Thanks for your positive review. This one was actually written just to see if the old Lex Ludite was still alive and in working order.
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Feb 3, 2004 |
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I'm probably reading too much into this, but it sounded to me like Lex had a particular Hawaiian golfer in mind. Lex solves the father's problem with losing his meal ticket in the closing paragraphs, and I found the physical description of the phenom quite pleasing. I am so tired of reading the words "Large breasted" on this site! I would wish she'd been older, but that's the age of the girl she's modeled on. One question, Lex: Did you post a story on another site about a female black-belt who got similarly initiated? This very much reminds me of it, but at a tenth the length. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Feb 7, 2004)
- Said Hawaiian golfer was the impetus to the story, but a certain pair of black tennis stars and their manipulative father, plus a certain Swiss tennis prodigy who was "coached" by her mother, not to mention a group of gymnasts from the US and Romania, and a few ice skaters from the US and Russia were also part of the composite that became Micky. Your perceptive review is greatly appreciated as well as your most generous rating. I have no connection whatsoever with the story you are referring to here.
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Jan 31, 2004 |
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The writing is OK, and the premise (the jealousy of the older, male players at the phenom's celebrity)could make for an excellent story, I think. I don't even mind so much that Maxine is only thirteen -- we do have female sports stars of that age. But does she have to be thirteen and plain? That stripped all the eroticism out of the story for me. In addition both the level of the abuse and the depiction of her father are way over the top for me. I think this could have been a much more credible (and enjoyable) story if there were two or three disgruntled golfers who kidnapped a girl as pretty as -- well, name your own recent female prodigy in tennis or golf, (after blindfolding her to protect their identity)and then "taught her a lesson" about encroaching in a 'man's world'. One could still keep the incest angle, I suppose, but the idea that even the most mercenary father or guardian would risk the health of his meal ticket the way he does in this story, just doesn't make sense. At least not to me. Love your reviews, Lex, but not this particular story line. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2004)
- As usual your review is cogent, non-judgemental and aimed at making this story better,all the marks of an excellent reviewer. Don't blush, take your bow and then duck! As I said before, this was just one of those hit and run accidents that occasionally gets out of the closet. Its only purpose was to check to make sure my stranger side was still operating as designed. To be blunt, I wouldn't have given it the generous rating you provided. It was only a test, nothing more. I am truly astonished that this little piece of fluff has drawn most of the heavy hitters in the reviewing world. Where did I go wrong? Oh, by the way where did you get the idea that "this sepia colored honey who was cute as a button" is plain? I believe this was line two of the story after the prologue.
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boccaccio2000g
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2004)
- Point taken about 'plain' -- not, the most apt word. I should have said 'unshapely', perhaps. "The girl had saucer shaped tits with pretty good-sized nipples ... From the back she looked more like a boy, her hips were almost non-existent and you could iron clothes on her ass..."
Maybe our ideas of saucers are different -- I picture them as rather 'flat'. Flat breasts, non-existent hips, flat butt -- there just wasn't much for me to cling to, here, Lex.
- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2004)
- Perhaps androgynous, rather than plain, would have been a better compromise. Certainly Micky was no blow-up doll, nor was she supposed to be.
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e.e. norcod
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Jan 25, 2004 |
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lex the way we love him. Short, brutal, and politically incorrect! But beating with towels filled with icecubes - that's a new one on me. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 25, 2004)
- Thanks for the overly generous review. I'll take it anyway. The ice cube one sort of percolated out of my fevered imagination. It sure beats (pardon the pun) a rubber hose for originality and would be something easily available at a golf club, don't you think?
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Jan 24, 2004 |
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Quick, but well written story. It's short and right to the point. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 24, 2004)
- Thanks for your generous review. You hit it on the head. This was just one of those quick hitters that sometimes jumps from the brain to the page without too much thought.
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| Reviewer:
Lord Thomas
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Jan 23, 2004 |
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Well written, but the story itself did not do anything for me. Not that is was not bad; but it lost plausibility as it went on. Sorry, LT (4/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 23, 2004)
- Your review is appreciated. Sorry you were bored; as for plausibility, please... This is a site which tolerates fantasy. You'd be amazed at what some of the victims can not only endure but survive intact. If you are looking for reality or plausibility, please avoid my stories, they usually don't obey the laws of physics or physiology; that's my alternative universe and its my creation, such as it is.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 23, 2004 |
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I realy like the story, my only concern is that it went to fast paced aside from that another great story by U!! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 23, 2004)
- Thank you for a very generous review. This one was just a quick hit and run accident to make sure that things were in working order and to remind me of my roots.
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Jan 22, 2004 |
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Short, violent, and not much plot. Writing quality is fine. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
lex ludite
(Edit) (Jan 23, 2004)
- No argument with anything you said. This one just broke out of the closet almost on its own. Your review is much appreciated.
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