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Annabel & Her Master
Author: Annabel Lee
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(Added on Jan 9, 2004)
(This month 13614 readers) (Total 32873 readers) |
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The adventures of Annabel, a beautiful young slave girl living and serving her Master and his friends and sometimes getting into trouble. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Mar 24, 2005 |
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This story could have been a good one. I have to ask: a Master left his girl alone all day, no food or water or close to a bathroom, tied to a bed? He sounds like a very uncaring and unconcerned Master to me. That being said, you typing was careless and you have poor sentence structure.
I think this story has potential, but you need to clean up your writing. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
teamster
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Mar 9, 2004 |
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although the action was fairly tame, the story was written well and its always interesting to me to get an authentic womans pov. a little more exposition about your feelings other than physical discomfort and worshipful adoration might add some depth. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Jan 31, 2004 |
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I thought that the first few pages were rather flat, but the dialogue at the end of the first installment shows some promise. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rickgran
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Jan 17, 2004 |
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Good start to a story, hope the rest keeps coming at the same level or higher of writing. (9/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Jan 13, 2004 |
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so far I am unimpressed. A reasonably pedestrian opening. If things improve, get graphic, get novel, if characters develope I will revise my rating. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 11, 2004 |
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so far great, hope there is much more to come (10/10)
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